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Good morning midnight
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 Posted: Tue Jun 25th, 2019 07:08 am
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Seamus
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Good morning midnight

Every evening I sit here
waiting for morning light
waiting for each day to end
good morning midnight

try to rush each day away
my way of getting through
sad and lonely living
got nothing else to do

hold on to my bottle
like its a bar of gold
looking through my window
watching life unfold

with every sip I take
time just slips away
another sip passes my lips
and I'm in another day

Every evening I sit here
waiting for morning light
waiting for each day to end
good morning midnight

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 Posted: Thu Jun 27th, 2019 12:05 am
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Mournful, but touching Alan.
"good morning midnight" is a strong hook.

I really liked:
hold on to my bottle
like its a bar of gold


You might try swapping:
watching life unfold > watch the morning light unfold
but you do already have some "morning light" references in there, so you may not want that.

with every sip I take > with every drop I take
just to avoid the repeat on 'sip" in the following line



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 Posted: Thu Jul 18th, 2019 10:39 am
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Hello...this is quite an expressive lyric. Do you have a melody/music? Just another idea for the verse RainyDayMan was referring to...

With every sip I take
Time just slips away
A lonely way to travel
Into another day

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