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 Posted: Thu Jun 6th, 2019 08:08 pm
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Seamus
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Brain racking, banging head
I lay alone in my bed
troubled, my wheels are grinding
no answers am I finding

rolling over back and to
all my thoughts are of you
clearly you don't want to know
but I just can't let you go

I am tortured day and night
don't want to give up the fight
go to bed but I can't sleep
pillow soaked as I weep

there's no future that I see
you have gone I'm only me
still a prisoner, can't get free
is this what my life's to be

thoughts trapped inside my head
won't let me rest on my bed
wrestling demons in my brain
nothing will ever be the same

quietly cry the nights away
hoping tomorrow will be a better day
but in my heart I know what's true
there's no tomorrow without you

CopyrightAlanEvans06062019



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 Posted: Thu Jun 6th, 2019 08:24 pm
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M.P. Dudash
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Alan, it works. I actually feel it would be best as a fast metal song though. That’s how I hear it.



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 Posted: Thu Jun 6th, 2019 11:35 pm
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I'm afraid that I have no musical talent whatsoever I only write words, thanks for looking friend and for the advice.



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 Posted: Sat Jun 8th, 2019 12:21 am
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Lots of anguish there. There's an element of self-pity that may make it harder for people to engage with. I think we've all felt that way at times, but it's not necessarily something we want to feel about ourselves, and therefore may not buy into in a lyric.

The rhythm of this has a short, staccato feel, which might be what Mike is picking up on. It does feel like it would fit a rock sound more than a country one.



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