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My newest tee shirt
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 Posted: Mon Jun 3rd, 2019 05:01 am
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Lots of years have passed us by
I'm surely now a different guy
life didn't quite go my way
watched my dreams drift away

living rough, ... times not been so good
things not worked out how they should
I got memories of better days
some of those have started to fade

an old friend put us back in touch
to meet again might be too much
I'm just a shadow of my old me
not the man I wanted to be

I have no image that can be sold
my newest tee shirt must be five years old
that together with my faded jeans
shows I'm not a man of means

I often just lay in my bed
a million thoughts going through my head
dark depressions fill me with dread
think I might be better dead

my ragged jeans and an old tee shirt
an old pair of trainers covered in dirt
that's the image I display
that's the man I am today

I have no image that can be sold
my newest tee shirt must be five years old
that together with my faded jeans
shows I'm not a man of means

and has my days draw to an end
I'll remember you has my bestest friend
thoughts of you bring to me a smile
cheers me for a little while


I haven't failed, I've found 10,000 ways that don't work. Thomas Edison (1847-1931)
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 Posted: Mon Jun 3rd, 2019 01:29 pm
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M.P. Dudash

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Alan, to the point and a topic most can relate to. Few small changes bestest to dearest. Thoughts of you bring me a smile and cheer me up for a little while. Guessing you just may have missed typing the up in the last line. It works.

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 Posted: Tue Jun 4th, 2019 10:31 am
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Gets across the state of depression very clearly.

Not convinced about the title, doesn't feel like there is enough emphasis on it in the lyric to justify that. Maybe a bit more focus on that if you feel it is at the core of the song.

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