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 Posted: Mon Jun 3rd, 2019 12:21 am
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M.P. Dudash
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She said if I had the chance
And for a night I got to choose
I’d cherish every moment
And spend that moment loving you

But I’m not sure she understands
I want more than just one night
I want to make forever
Be how we live our lives

Will I always be your maybe
Or will time someday tell
Will we finally find forever
Or keep living in this hell

Cause we both share these feelings
We keep hiding from the truth
Will I always be your maybe
You know my soul belongs to you

You know if we ever make love
I’m gonna take it nice and slow
Pour every ounce of passion
Deep into your soul

I’ll take you on a journey
Where ecstasy has no end
I know we’ll find forever
Cause what we have is not pretend

Will I always be your maybe
Or will we ever take the fall
Will we reveal the truth
To ourselves once and for all

Let me look into your eyes
And let our souls be joined as one
Will I always be your maybe
Or will our time finally come

Will I always be your maybe
Will I ever be the one
Please take the time to make me
It’s the only way to save me

Or will I always be your maybe


Copyright © 6/2/2019 Michael P. Dudash

Last edited on Sat Jun 8th, 2019 05:04 am by M.P. Dudash



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 Posted: Mon Jun 3rd, 2019 01:48 am
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I like it Mike! Got a crooner sort of vibe to it.

Where ecstasy has no end
"ecstasy" feels like it might be awkward to sing there, but once you have a melody you'll know whether it fits or not.

I'd suggest swapping pretend > pretense here:
Cause what we have is not pretend
to me, pretend has too much of a childish feel to it, and I think the rhyme still holds.

I found myself combining
Will I always be your maybe...
with
Cause we both share these feelings...
to make an extended chorus. So you might have an option there if you wanted to do that.

Potentially you could swap night > moment and make it:
I’d cherish every moment
And spend that moment loving you

but it works fine as it is too.

Not sure about the change of rhyme in the last chorus.
Best to hear how it sounds, but it certainly stands out as being different looking at it. If you do end up changing it , I'd keep:
It’s the only way to save me
as that's a good one.

But all up, I can feel the rhythm in it, and it flows very nicely. Good stuff!



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 Posted: Mon Jun 3rd, 2019 03:21 am
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Hi Mike,
This is well written and I find myself reminiscing about the maybes that live forever in my heart. Loves that I think about what could have happened if only this or that came to pass. I written lyrics about this subject that is so haunting. I’m sure you’ll make a few change once it’s put to song. That usually seem to happen. I love it. It’s tight, succinct and easy to read to a point where I can almost hear the music. Very nice.

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 Posted: Tue Jun 4th, 2019 02:26 am
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Thanks for the input fellas! I appreciate the suggestions Owen and I’ve had a few ideas for it as well changed may be coming. Thanks



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nicely done, good topic.



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Thanks Alan.



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I would love to hear this one. A couple of "bumpy spots" but on the whole if has a good flow and feeling to it. I suspect that women would go for this song. I know that this was Conway Twitty's main criteria: "Will the ladies like this song?"



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 Posted: Sun Jun 9th, 2019 02:44 am
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Thanks Tekboy. I’ve got some work to do on it yet, but I’m pretty happy with the overall concept.



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I am so happy to be reading your lyrics again. You know I belong to a different genre, so I will offer only my opinion.

I think it is well written, but a little sappy.

Owen suggested, "Got a crooner sort of vibe to it", so that night work really nicely.



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