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I love the smell of gasoline
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 Posted: Fri May 31st, 2019 12:42 am
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Seamus
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I love the smell of gasoline

I was born a petrol head
brought up on gas with lead
daddy loved hot rod magazines
he had oil all over his jeans
I love the smell of gasoline

way back when I was a kid
copying things my daddy did
pretending I was a mechanic too
playing with bolts and screws

I remember it like it was yesterday
all the other kids were out at play
I'd be getting in my daddy's way
listening to things he'd say

gotta make sure juice is getting through
check those plugs are sparking too
tune the carb check the coil
that's why daddy's always covered in oil

I was born a petrol head
brought up on gas with lead
daddy loved hot rod magazines
he had oil all over his jeans
I love the smell of gasoline

I was born a petrol head
brought up on gas with lead
daddy loved hot rod magazines
he had oil all over his jeans
I love the smell of gasoline

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 Posted: Sat Jun 1st, 2019 03:45 am
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Good stuff! I particularly like the two verses that start:
way back when I was a kid
and
I remember it like it was yesterday

You could even start the song with:
way back when I was a kid
then go into:
I was born a petrol head
which feels like your chorus.

I'm less keen on the A,A,B,B,B rhyming scheme, though granted that other people will see if differently.
You could try repeating your title line within the chorus:
I was born a petrol head
I love the smell of gasoline
brought up on gas with lead
daddy loved hot rod magazines
he had oil all over his jeans
I love the smell of gasoline

which would make it A,B,A,B,B,B
I do like the way that "I love the smell of gasoline" follows on from "he had oil all over his jeans" - makes it make sense.

The part that goes:
gotta make sure juice is getting through
would make a nice bridge with a different melody.



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