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Pouring Whiskey On A Rose
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 Posted: Thu May 30th, 2019 03:25 pm
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M.P. Dudash
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In the garden
Of my memories
Remains... but one rose

Her voice
No longer lingers
It’s always, the first to go

What once grew
In the sunshine
From the light of.. our love
Is now just a memory
One I can’t give up

I’m pouring whiskey on a rose
In hopes to, ease the pain
A picture of perfection
Is all, that remains

Why does something so pretty
Have to wilt away and go
Now I’m stuck here pouring whiskey
Pouring whiskey on a rose

Why’s this hell
Pull me closer
To my Heaven, each night

Another empty
Whiskey bottle
Another step towards, the light

We promised
Our love
Till death, do us part
So why does it still linger
Here in my heart

I’m pouring whiskey on a rose again
In hopes to, ease the pain
A picture of perfection
Is all, that remains

Why does something so pretty
Have to wilt away and go
Now I’m stuck here pouring whiskey
Pouring whiskey on a rose

This pain that I know
Continues to grow
Such a beautiful flower
Called back home

So now I’m
Pouring whiskey....
On a.... rose


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 Posted: Thu May 30th, 2019 08:31 pm
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I really like this, nice job friend.



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 Posted: Fri May 31st, 2019 01:36 am
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Very nice Mike! Lovely hook and the whole lyric is very smooth.

You might consider 'Whiskey On A Rose' as your title and drop the Pouring.

The only line that wasn't clear to me was:
It’s always, the first to go
And that's not a bad one, just wasn't sure why it was there.

Slow, sad, drinking song. A Mike Dudash special ;)



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 Posted: Fri May 31st, 2019 03:13 am
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Thanks guys! Owen, that line was meant to mean the memory of someone’s voice. At least for me that seems to be the hardest thing to remember of a loved one after their passing. Also, I originally had it as whiskey on a rose. I agree with you there. Thanks for looking gentlemen.



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I like it. The hook is really captivating.

"Her voice
No longer lingers
It’s always, the first to go" - this made sense to me

"Have to wilt away and go" - I feel this line can be stronger. To me it reads a bit awkward.



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 Posted: Tue Jun 4th, 2019 02:27 am
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Thanks for looking Andrea. That line was more to stick with the Rose theme than anything else I could take it or leave it.



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Wow, this is another great one. Great lyrics and flow.



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 Posted: Tue Jun 4th, 2019 08:32 pm
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Thanks Sam.



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