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 Posted: Sat Apr 20th, 2019 05:31 pm
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Lyla is from an ancient Persian poem and broadway musical, titled, “Layla and Majnun”. My version has more to do with the death of one’s earthly desires to rejoin with the beloved and achieve oneness. Majnun (the “u” is long) means crazy. 

Lyla
Music by Richard Rompies, lyrics by Charles Anderson
Verse/Chorus
Verse 1:
With silver spoon he tossed aside
His heart searched for something more
He washed away all self and pride
And sought until his hands were sore

Verse 2:
And then one day he caught a flash
Of Lyla’s smile while in town
With heart aglow, he made a dash
She disappeared without a sound

Chorus:
Lyla, your raven hair, your face so fair
Lyla, my heart’s on fire; you’re my desire
Lyla, my soul to give; I cannot live
One day without your love

Verse 3:
With years and days swirled in a haze
He hunted for her one night
Nine watchmen caught him in a maze
He cried for Lyla while in flight

Chorus: (as above)
Lyla, your raven hair, your face so fair
Lyla, my heart’s on fire; you’re my desire
Lyla, my soul to give; I cannot live
One day without your love

Verse 4:
He cursed the watchmen, tried to hide
‘Til he drew onto a wall
With nimble feet and lengthy stride
He scaled its heights onto a fall

Verse 5:
Within a garden with a light
She’s searching for her lost ring
He praised the Lord and prayed He might
Exalt the watchmen for the sting

Chorus: (as above)
Lyla, your raven hair, your face so fair
Lyla, my heart’s on fire; you’re my desire
Lyla, my soul to give; I cannot live
One day without your love

© 2018 Charles M Anderson

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 Posted: Sun Apr 21st, 2019 10:58 pm
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Very interesting!

This may be one where an understanding of the context is important to appreciate the lyric.

I saw your explanation, but I didn't really get that from the lyric. But if I was familiar with the poem or the musical I may not need the explanation!


And sought until his hands were sore
Perhaps it's how you visualize this, but would "feet" fit better here?

With years and days
The "with" feels slightly odd there to me. I would probably use "the".

He hunted for her one night
You might try "each night", even allowing the following events only take place on a specific night.

The chorus has an interesting structure, I can't quite pick the rhythm there. Look forward to hearing it when you have found your vocalist.

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 Posted: Mon Apr 22nd, 2019 12:52 am
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It’s written like a love song, but the lines have a specific meaning relating to the progress of the journeyer. Case in point: the line “And sought until his hands were sore” refers to the commentary of the wise men who came upon the Majnun on his knees sifting through the sand. They ask what he was searching for and he replied Layla. They laughed and said she was of pure spirit and not of this world. He said he searches everywhere for her that perchance he shall fine her. He who seeks a thing with zeal shall find it.

The “With” in the verse 3 helps the first line wrap to the second line and matches the beginning of verses 1 and 5.

“He hunted for her one night”. He’d like to look for every night, but he’s pulled away by worldly obligations.

I sing the chorus out quite readily. I’m anxious to hear the singer sing it too.

Thanks for your suggestions, Charles

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 Posted: Tue Apr 23rd, 2019 12:16 am
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The story is very interesting. I really loved the first 2 verses - I was drawn in right away wanting to know more. I like the chorus a lot too.

V3 is hard to understand. The years and days makes me think he has been searching for her so long he can no longer keep track, but the second line suggests it is just one night.
"With years and days swirled in a haze
He hunted for her one night"



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 Posted: Tue Apr 23rd, 2019 02:46 am
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Hi Andrea,
Verse 3, line one shows he has lost all concepts of time and space. Line two returns him to his desperate search. Lyla is constantly calling him from the inner depths of his heart ever since the epiphany in verse 2, where he caught a trace of the traceless friend.


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You know, Andrea, RD Man, and anyone who reads this lyric: the journey of the Majnun is a perilous and wonderful experience. For me it started in war where we got in this intense battle. It was then I caught a trace of the traceless friend (Lyla). I sought everywhere to find the answers I was seeking for the very life of me. But it wasn’t until I was at my wits end (the wall) that it came to me. And, strangely, it was as if I was being sought all along. If I’d known where I was being guided to, I wouldn’t have cursed the watchmen. But I didn’t, so I did. Thank God!

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It sounds like an intense experience.
The lyric clearly has a lot of personal significance for you.

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I like the story, and the words trip off the tongue. Not sure I'd understand it without explanation, but that really doesn't really matter; the words sit well together in a very poetic way and that'll create the mood you want - sure it'll sound great sung. I couldn't quite get the rhythm in the chorus, so very interested to hear it sung.

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 Posted: Mon Jul 15th, 2019 12:18 am
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Okay, the rhythm of the chorus goes:
Lines 1-3: two half notes, four quarter notes, four quarter notes; ta-tum, tum-ta, tum-ta, tum-ta, tum-ta, pause.
Line 4: two quarter notes, four quarter notes; tum-ta, pause, tum-ta, tum-ta.

Anyway that’s how I sing it; as per the music I have for it.

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