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 Posted: Mon Apr 15th, 2019 06:13 am
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I’m showing the format to be AABA, but V1 is the same as V3 and V2 is like V4, but each pair different; so it’s not exactly AABA. When I sing it out it sounds fine. Also, it’s a double bridge lyric.

Without Reservations Of Course
AABA
A1:
I thought I'd call you tonight
I hope you're doing alright
Sorry to hear that it didn't work out
And you two divorced
But you know I'm always siding with you
Without reservations of course

A2:
No, you don't need to assume
Yes, you can still have that room
I'll move you back if you like
I know that it's not your only recourse
I'll get it picked up tonight
And reserved for your use
Without reservations of course

Bridge 1:
I recall the nights I stayed up extra late for you
Now I find myself setting an extra plate for you

A3:
You know I dated one time
To get you out of my mind
For an hour or two but it didn’t work out
And ended midcourse
But you know I'm only thinking 'bout you
Without reservations of course

Bridge 2:
I recall the time you made that special date with him
Now I find you crying since you're second rate with him

A4:
No, don't start crying again
Yes, you can still be his friend
I'll help you pick up your life
I know that I'm not your only resource
I'll get a ticket tonight
And be on the next plane
Without reservations of course

© 2004 Charles M Anderson

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 Posted: Mon Apr 15th, 2019 06:47 am
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I'm imagining this with a slightly jazzy, sophisticated feel. Full of minor 7ths played on a piano in a smoky bar :)

I like how the rhyming scheme differs within the verse.
...A
...A
...x
...B
...x
...B
If V1/3 are different to V2/4 you have the option of varying across those as well - not that you need to.

A minor thing, but I'm guessing he's not sorry to hear they broke up, so you could reword that along the lines:
I heard that things didn't work out

Nice play on words with 'reservations' across the different scenes. :)

Depending on your syllable count I would drop the "out" in :
Now I find myself setting out an extra plate for you

This line struck me as slightly odd:
I recall the time you made that special date with him
I suppose there are plenty of scenarios as to how he would know about it, but it felt just slightly creepy to me. That could be just a personal reaction though.

All up I like it. A complex, sophisticated song.

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 Posted: Mon Apr 15th, 2019 12:49 pm
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I like it. I am reading a song about unrequited love? It appears to me this guy has it all in for this girl, but she only has friend for him. I think he shouldn't let her move back -lol.

The verses are strong. I agree this is a little odd, but I think I get it: "I recall the time you made that special date with him"



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 Posted: Mon Apr 15th, 2019 05:04 pm
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They were a couple and he never got over her. With three pronoun changes I could reverse the roles. The singer is totally in love and will always be. When one is in that state practicality goes out-the-window. I wrote a lyric that explains this state in which one is taken almost to another reality; i.e., the realm of love.

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Hi Charles, I guess I wasn't sure if they had ever been a couple because of a few lines: No, you don't need to assume
Yes, you can still have that room" (not sharing the same room). Also he waits for her to come in late (I assumed she was out with other people).

Either way, I like the story. I will check out Realm of Love - is it posted?



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 Posted: Mon Apr 15th, 2019 11:46 pm
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He wants her to return but on her terms, not being too forward. Yes, he’ll wait for her forever, no matter who she goes out with or who she may marry.

The realm of love is a state of existence; the song’s name is the ‘Eagle of Love’, which I haven’t posted.

Charles

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Hey RD Man, I did directly answer your message. Sorry, 🙁.
1. I agree on the jazz/blues type music with minors and 7ths. I was thinking about placing it in that category, but, depending on the music, it could fit in pop or adult contemporary.
2. The A stanzas vary, but I simply flagged it as AABA, since that’s its basis.
3. He is sorry they divorced since he more concerned about her happiness than his.
4. The varying themes of ‘Reservations’ was how I started to write this lyric. That and the rhyming words: divorce, course, midcourse, etc.
5. I needed to drop the ‘out’ in the first bridge. Thanks.
6. The ‘special date with him’ show how crazy in love he is; even to the point of sacrificing his own happiness. I wrote another lyric called Lyla that brings out the crazy-in-love theme more clearly.

Charles

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