The Songwriters' Forum - by Songwriters, for Songwriters Home 

Welcome to The Songwriters' Forum - by Songwriters, for Songwriters!
Please log on to view our discussion forum in its entirety.

Pawn shop guitar
 Moderated by: Troy33, RainyDayMan, HankTheTank
New Topic Reply Printer Friendly
 Rate Topic 
AuthorPost
 Posted: Mon Apr 1st, 2019 04:53 am
  PMQuoteReply
1st Post
LongShadows
Member


Joined: Wed Jul 18th, 2012
Location: Portland, Oregon USA
Posts: 225
Favorite Artist: CSNY, Dylan, Paul Simon, Yes, Tull, the Who, Floyd, Patti, ...
I am a: Songwriter/Musician
Status: 
Offline
More folk than country, but it is 3/4 time.

Pawn Shop Guitar

The tone knobs were yellow
as Keith Richards' fingers
The bridge was on backwards
and it was short a few strings
As it hung in a pawn shop
Behind the main counter
It cast a pale shadow
On old watches and rings

The old man seemed fettered
when I asked him to see it
As if taking it down
was some onerous chore
There were no other axes
Hanging where you could see 'em
And no one else shoppin'
in his little store

Chorus
*What could be so lonely
as a pawn shop guitar?
Once loved, but still left
And forgotten in time
Abandoned by someone
Chasin' some other star
There's nothin' so lonely as
A pawn shop guitar*


The strap buttons rattled
like old gypsy jewelry
The stain was once cherry
and the tuners were chrome
I thought I should buy it
Just to end its misery
But the wife would be livid
if I brought this mutt home

It was painted and sanded
then painted again
It was drownin' in lacquer
and hardware upgrades
There were gashes and gouges
and bullet holes, maybe
I flipped it over
to see where it was made

**

There was no truss rod cover
or decals remainin'
The serial number
Was half sanded away
I went to the window
to throw some light on it
The stamp in the headstock
said U S of A!

I carefully studied
the open book profile
And the holes in the top
where a pick guard once stood
And as I suspected
When I first laid eyes on it
I knew I was holdin'
One fine chunk of wood

**

Now the old man was glarin'
from his stool at the counter
"You gonna read that or buy it?
This ain't the lye berry!"
"So, where did you get this?"
I asked, nonchalantly
His eyes went as gray as
an old cemetery

He said, "Honestly, I don't know
All that much about it,
Some drunk brought in here
last New Year's eve
You can have it for fifty
if you're payin' cash money"
I gave him three twenties
and I ran like a thief!

**

Gregg Barrett 2019



____________________
Just call me Gregg
Back To Top 


 Posted: Mon Apr 1st, 2019 12:45 pm
  PMQuoteReply
2nd Post
Andrea
Contributor
 

Joined: Tue Nov 27th, 2018
Location: Poughkeepsie, New York USA
Posts: 842
Favorite Artist: Queen, Tom Petty, Metallica, Kansas, Guns N' Roses
I am a: Songwriter
Status: 
Offline
Great story. Played out like a scene in my head as I read it.

I just love this verse:
Now the old man was glarin'
from his stool at the counter
"You gonna read that or buy it?
This ain't the lye berry!" - this made me chuckle
"So, where did you get this?"
I asked, nonchalantly
His eyes went as gray as
an old cemetery



____________________
Andrea
Back To Top


 Posted: Mon Apr 1st, 2019 06:21 pm
  PMQuoteReply
3rd Post
SongWriterJoe
Member


Joined: Thu Mar 22nd, 2018
Location: Eugene, Oregon USA
Posts: 215
Favorite Artist: Randy Travis, Garth Brooks, The Monkees, The Beatles, Santana, 3 ...
I am a: Singer/Songwriter
Status: 
Offline
Great work Greg. I can almost hear this being played on the radio. This would work as folk, Americana, or country. If country, might have to reference a famous country guitarist and call it a/an "(good) ol' pawnshop geetar"

SWJ

Last edited on Mon Apr 1st, 2019 06:27 pm by SongWriterJoe



____________________
"I'm not sure if my heart is in my music - or my music is in my heart!"
Back To Top 


 Posted: Mon Apr 1st, 2019 11:10 pm
  PMQuoteReply
4th Post
RainyDayMan
TSF Administrator


Joined: Thu May 17th, 2007
Location: Stratford, Australia
Posts: 5692
Favorite Artist: James Taylor, Cat Stevens, Joni Mitchell
I am a: Songwriter/Musician
Status: 
Offline
Good write Gregg!

I like the mystery of whose guitar it might have been.

Lots of vivid detail and atmosphere to complement the narrative.

My favorite line was:
The strap buttons rattled
like old gypsy jewelry



____________________
https://soundcloud.com/RainyDayMan/tracks
https://www.soundclick.com/bands3/default.cfm?bandID=708281
Back To Top


 Posted: Tue Apr 2nd, 2019 03:41 am
  PMQuoteReply
5th Post
Kel
Member
 

Joined: Thu Feb 7th, 2019
Location: Brisbane, Australia
Posts: 145
Favorite Artist: George Strait, Lee Kernaghan, Troy Cassar Daley, Adam Harvey
I am a: Songwriter
Status: 
Offline
What a great lyric! Terrific read. I was lost in the story, and it was so easy to read and "hear" as it went along.

I'd love to hear what you do with it.

Kel



____________________
Life is 10% what happens to me and 90% what I do about it. Scipio Africanus
Back To Top 


 Posted: Sun Apr 7th, 2019 01:07 am
  PMQuoteReply
6th Post
Motorist Sketchbook
Member


Joined: Sat Apr 28th, 2018
Location: Minneapolis, Minnesota USA
Posts: 922
Favorite Artist: 
I am a: Singer/Songwriter/Musician
Status: 
Offline
I had to check this one out.
The title got me.

Like others have said, I really like the story.
Especially liked the character building of the old guy working there.
I loved the, "This ain't the lye berry!" line. - lol

I like the hint that it was a Gibson guitar. (the open book profile)A Gibson head-stock, obviously.

- Sketch



____________________
Blue Collar Road Scholar

Motorist Sketchbook - SoundCloud link:
https://soundcloud.com/user-426611522
Back To Top


 Posted: Sun Apr 7th, 2019 06:12 am
  PMQuoteReply
7th Post
LongShadows
Member


Joined: Wed Jul 18th, 2012
Location: Portland, Oregon USA
Posts: 225
Favorite Artist: CSNY, Dylan, Paul Simon, Yes, Tull, the Who, Floyd, Patti, ...
I am a: Songwriter/Musician
Status: 
Offline
Motorist Sketchbook wrote:


I like the hint that it was a Gibson guitar. (the open book profile)A Gibson head-stock, obviously.

- Sketch



Yes, I was thinking an old Les Paul, worth $60 regardless of condition.



____________________
Just call me Gregg
Back To Top 


 Posted: Sun Apr 7th, 2019 11:24 am
  PMQuoteReply
8th Post
Motorist Sketchbook
Member


Joined: Sat Apr 28th, 2018
Location: Minneapolis, Minnesota USA
Posts: 922
Favorite Artist: 
I am a: Singer/Songwriter/Musician
Status: 
Offline
LongShadows wrote: Motorist Sketchbook wrote:


I like the hint that it was a Gibson guitar. (the open book profile)A Gibson head-stock, obviously.

- Sketch



Yes, I was thinking an old Les Paul, worth $60 regardless of condition.

Yes, another five dollars worth of paint remover would bring it a long way.

The only guitar I actually made money on was a pawn shop guitar.
I found a Brian Moore electric for $300. I sold it for $500.
I hated to part with it, but I needed $ to finish my project guitar. (my #1 partscaster)
I made friends with the guy I sold it to. An amp builder. Interesting guy.
He has promised not to sell it without giving me first offer. Sweet.
I still visit them from time to time. (him and the guitar)

- Sketch



____________________
Blue Collar Road Scholar

Motorist Sketchbook - SoundCloud link:
https://soundcloud.com/user-426611522
Back To Top


 Posted: Sat Jun 8th, 2019 01:48 pm
  PMQuoteReply
9th Post
Tekboy
Member


Joined: Sun Oct 28th, 2007
Location: Leesburg, Florida USA
Posts: 233
Favorite Artist: James Taylor
I am a: Singer/Songwriter/Musician
Status: 
Offline
I don't know if anyone "recites" like Porter Waggoner used to do, but I believe that would be the perfect format for this song. I would probably sing the chorus between every three or four stanzas, and recite the rest to a slow, mournful acoustic guitar. Good stuff here!

Last edited on Sat Jun 8th, 2019 01:50 pm by Tekboy



____________________
"I cried when I wrote this song
Sue me if I play it wrong".
Back To Top 


 Posted: Mon Jun 10th, 2019 05:59 pm
  PMQuoteReply
10th Post
mike67
Member


Joined: Wed Sep 13th, 2017
Location: London, United Kingdom
Posts: 107
Favorite Artist: Various
I am a: Songwriter
Status: 
Offline
What a great story and lyric; smart and funny in equal measure. Love to hear the final song. My own pawn shop guitar as isn't quite of the same caliber as the one in the story, a Epi 339, but cleaned her up and replaced the harness and the pups with Lollars, and she sing like an angel, at least when I'm not playing her:D



____________________
t w o f r o m z e r o
https://soundcloud.com/mike-warnes
Back To Top


Current time is 06:51 pm

Top



UltraBB 1.172 Copyright © 2007-2016 Data 1 Systems
Page processed in 0.2213 seconds (29% database + 71% PHP). 29 queries executed.