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 Posted: Wed Mar 27th, 2019 08:19 am
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Love Is A Prayer
Verse/Chorus
Chorus:
Love is a prayer that glows in your heart
And sings to you to make a new start
That renews you soul and eases your cares, and
Sure as the sun shines everywhere
Love is a light, love is a prayer

Verse 1:
Her faith and belief we’re starting to fall
It seemed to her the world didn’t care
Her love for family and friends hit a wall
She searched her mind ‘til her soul was bare
Cried in her heart to make sense of it all
But she couldn’t quite see that love is a prayer

Chorus: (as above)
Love is a prayer that glows in your heart
And sings to you to make a new start
That renews you soul and eases your cares, and
Sure as the sun shines everywhere
Love is a light, love is a prayer

Verse 2:
Her love for her man was in a downfall
She searched her heart but nothing was there
She hated her fate but couldn’t forestall
The karma she felt that seemed unfair
She fell to her knees and cried out a call
Then she started to see that love is a prayer

Chorus: (as above)
Love is a prayer that glows in your heart
And sings to you to make a new start
That renews you soul and eases your cares, and
Sure as the sun shines everywhere
Love is a light, love is a prayer

Verse 3:
Whenever she’s in a push-comes-to-shove
She prays her heart will always be fair
To those in her life with help from above
And even when she has not a care
She hopes that her life will be full of love
‘Cause she knows that it’s true that love is a prayer

Chorus: (as above)
Love is a prayer that glows in your heart
And sings to you to a make a new start
That renews you soul and eases your cares, and
Sure as the sun shines everywhere
Love is a light, love is a prayer

Post Chorus:
Sure as the sun shines everywhere, she knows... love is a light, love is a prayer

© 2019 Charles M Anderson

Last edited on Wed Jul 31st, 2019 07:21 am by cmaja



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 Posted: Wed Mar 27th, 2019 11:31 pm
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I like the core of this Charles, but some lines feel a bit awkward to me. I think there is a gem waiting here, but needing more polish.

"Love Is A Prayer" is a great title and hook.
"Love is a light, love is a prayer" that's a great line and builds nicely from your hook.

I like how you start with the chorus too.

The rhyming scheme is tight, but you've made that work for you and there is enough variation there, and with the chorus, to keep the listener engaged.

For me verse 2 is the strongest. It feels like you've drawn the themes of love, relationship and faith together along with a sense of direction and progress, ie she was in trouble but faith put her back on the right track.
You could even ditch verse 1 and start right here if you wanted to.

The following lines felt a bit unnatural in their phrasing to me:
Of that which you know simply is true
That breathes life in you with ethereal air, and
Whenever she in a push comes to shove


And sings out to you to be apart
Why apart? I think most people would think of love being an attractive force

"kin" felt out of place stylistically. "Family and friends" feels smoother to me.

v3 doesn't feel quite as tight as v2 but it does feel like the right message. With renewed faith she'll put her trust in prayer to bring love into her life. That builds off v2 and gives a sense of conclusion.

Well worth pursuing!



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 Posted: Thu Mar 28th, 2019 01:11 am
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Thanks for the suggestions. The “apart” is a typo, it should be “a part”. Corrected. The otter inputs are worthy of reflection.

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 Posted: Thu Mar 28th, 2019 04:45 am
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Thanks, again, RainyDayMan; your suggestions proved accurate. I rewrote it, incorporating your insights. I think I have a much improved lyric now.

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 Posted: Thu Mar 28th, 2019 04:48 am
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Nice! That feels really smooth now! Well done sir :)



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 Posted: Thu Mar 28th, 2019 01:06 pm
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I read this yesterday and again now. I think it is better.

It is very pretty. I really like the title/hook.

One possible suggestion: in your chorus

"That renews you soul and eases your cares": It renews your soul and eases your cares.



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 Posted: Thu Mar 28th, 2019 07:01 pm
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I thought about the “that” going to “it”. But the it refers back to “love is a prayer”, kinda leaving the second line dangling. The that refers to the “start” in the previous line wrapping it nicely. Check it out.

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 Posted: Thu Mar 28th, 2019 07:42 pm
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Cmaja, welcome aboard. I haven’t been around for a month or so nice to see a new face. It’s a nice write. I really like the chorus. The longer verses make it a little hard for me to place to music but I cannot hear how you have intended them. I’m sure it will work once put to music. Nice job!



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 Posted: Thu Mar 28th, 2019 09:28 pm
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Thanks for the kind words. May my new face be displayed in words. For your sake. How the verses work out will depend on the collaboration.

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 Posted: Thu Mar 28th, 2019 09:44 pm
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I had tried it both ways, and both seems fine to me. It depends on how you hear it and wish it to be :)



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Yea Andrea, I guess it simply a matter of subjectivity. The singer and composer may have even different perspectives. I’ll find out eventually.

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