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 Posted: Tue Mar 19th, 2019 10:42 am
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Hi guys I don't get on here as often as i'd like as I cant access the site at work now. I'm after some feedback on this new song that i've finished writing this morning. It's a bit more rock n roll for me than usual. It's a first demo and I wanted to share so I can get some advice as I develop the song, the recording isn't perfect and the vocals are well, very off let's just say. I'm after your thoughts on the song and maybe some help with the melody if at all possible please. Thank you.



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Verse 1

Wipe my feet on your dreams
And everywhere you've been
I'm here to let you know
I ain't buying your show

Bridge

Cos i'm on my knees
Lookin like you won't believe

Chorus

Do you believe in me?
Like I believe in you?
Are you keeping on
To everything that feels so wrong
Holding on for far too long

Verse 2

You wipe your feet on my dreams
And everywhere i've been
You're here to let me know
You ain't buying my show

Bridge/Chorus

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VAn3Hq9omHw



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 Posted: Thu Mar 21st, 2019 07:10 am
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I quite like the rockier sound Kev.

I think my favourite lines are
To everything that feels so wrong
Holding on for far too long

the rapid fire delivery there works for me.

I'd like to hear a little more contrast between the chorus and the verse. The chord progressions feel similar.
You might try to change it up there by holding on to some notes and really sing them out - change the pace on the first couple of lines. More like:
Do you bel-ie-ieve in me?
Like I bel-ie-ieve in you?
something like that.

As always, just my 2 cents worth!

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I like the feel of this. Your voice fits the rock-n-roll.

I like this: 'Wipe my feet on your dreams". Cool line. Pulled me in wanting to know more!



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 Posted: Mon Apr 1st, 2019 01:25 pm
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Thanks guys! Here's a live 1+1 version please let me know how you think the song is developing
https://youtu.be/mr2PO0lKGTo



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The guitar tone feels a bit more electric in this version. Do you have some FX plugged in here?

And the recording seems cleaner.

I'm afraid I didn't pick up any other changes if there were any.

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I like it Kev. I bit different from what you normally post.



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 Posted: Tue Apr 2nd, 2019 12:21 pm
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I like this. It has a good vibe. I enjoyed the guitar. Some drums and a bass would take it to the next level.



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 Posted: Tue Apr 2nd, 2019 12:52 pm
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After I listened to your song, another song kept popping in my head. You song reminds me of the Mother by Danzig. Very cool :)



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 Posted: Tue Apr 2nd, 2019 01:03 pm
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Thanks guys, I'll checkout Mother not sure I've heard it before.



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 Posted: Mon Apr 15th, 2019 11:25 am
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Well I played the song live for the first time yesterday, I was really nervous for some reason, usually i'm not too bad. Anyway, if you wouldn't mind have a little watch and letting me know what you think please :)
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LKrStrW7Kq4



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Good stuff Kev! I thought it came off well :)

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 Posted: Mon Apr 15th, 2019 12:17 pm
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Thanks man!



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Great performance Kev. Couldn’t tell you were nervous at all.
Don’t have any constructive criticism for this one, it’s a pretty solid track.



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 Posted: Mon Apr 15th, 2019 08:33 pm
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Bravo! Probably my favorite of yours!



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Thanks so much guys 👍



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