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 Posted: Sun Jan 20th, 2019 08:43 pm
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Arts Tunes
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AUDIO here: https://youtu.be/aOUi-4WyL6o

I was on my way to the library to pick up Tom T. Hall's "The Songwriter's Handbook" when I got an idea for a title, "She Was Right."

Coming back from the library and walking around the frozen food section at Walmart, the first verse of this song came to me almost whole. Back at home, the next two verses came pretty easily, as well.

As well as a country ballad, this could be a good adult contemporary song, too.

I do not actually have a wife and daughter, but singing the verse about the daughter really got to me, anyhow! I had to do multiple takes and focused my attention on the lamp in front of me to get through it!

SHE WAS RIGHT

Mom said,
"Don't got out in shorts
It's the dead of winter
Don't eat those snacks
You'll spoil your dinner

"Don't waste your money
on loose women and wine
Some day, son, you'll find someone
who loves you like I do"

I knew when I found you
she was right

And you say,
"Help me with the dishes
Put your socks in the hamper
Go buy some clothes
You're a fashion disaster

"Though we may fight sometimes
most couples do
No one beneath the sun
loves you like I do"

I think to myself,
"She is right
She is right"

And I say,
"Put on your coat
it's the dead of winter
Go wash your hands
before you come to dinner

"You're daddy's pride and joy
Everyone knows that's true
Someday you'll find the man
who truly deserves you

"On your wedding day you'll say,
He was right
Dad was right"

© 2019 Art Howard (BMI)

Last edited on Sun Jan 20th, 2019 08:46 pm by Arts Tunes

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 Posted: Sun Jan 20th, 2019 09:47 pm
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That is really good. The lyrics are very touching. I like how you tell a story, starting from a child, to a man, and then to a dad. The last verse is the best part. Watching your child grow up and eventually getting married. Great songwriting.
I enjoyed your guitar picking too. The chord progression goes great with your vocals.
Do you plan on adding anything else to it? More guitars, vocal harmonies, etc..? I think it's great as it is. But with a little more production it could really shine.
Either way, it's a great tune. I really like the tracks you've been posting here.



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 Posted: Sun Jan 20th, 2019 10:36 pm
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Honestly, I really like the lyrics. I actually got some goosebumps reading them. I am not crazy on the music though. Just my opinion though.



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 Posted: Thu Jan 24th, 2019 09:01 pm
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Thanks, folks!

This is just what's called a "work tape," meaning a rough sketch of the song with just me and the acoustic. This is done as a test balloon to see how the melody and lyrical concept strike people before you go "all in" and make a demo. If people think it stinks, you haven't wasted any time and in some cases money. Down the road the production could take any number of directions -- a real singer would be at the top of my list.

I think this is one of the best things I've done so far. It sort of amazes me, less than a year ago I thought I had no idea how to write lyrics. Now I think I'm getting the hang of it!

Thanks again!

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 Posted: Mon Feb 11th, 2019 08:43 am
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Sounds like ideas come to you like they do me... from somewhere?

Anyhow, I do like the story and how you are telling it.

I found your simple accompaniment perfect for the song.

Great job.

Kel



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