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Of Eagles and devils
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 Posted: Thu Jan 17th, 2019 06:55 pm
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When The Eagles Gather ©

Now the city streets are angry and the devil's running free
Everyone wants to follow is there no one who would lead
Some folks kill each other for the colors that they wear
And the three AM siren wails fill the poisoned air

Wrong or right is something on which we cannot agree
We're seeing what the kids have learned at their daddy's knee
A mama cries old Lord please don't let it be my son
With tear stained eyes a lawman asks do you know where he got the gun

Could it be that hated prophet was right all along
Did we really sell our soul for pleasure and a song
Will the moon turn blood red and the sun no longer shine
Or could it be it's just me and I have lost my mind

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Well I read some place I think it was in Matthew twenty four
That the time would come when we would hear the rumor of war
But this would just begin the sorrows much more lay in store
When the eagles gather in the air he'll be standing at the door

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 Posted: Thu Jan 17th, 2019 08:25 pm
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I like the melody of this one, especially the chorus

You might try:
But this would just begin the sorrows > The beginning of the sorrows

I think this might have wider appeal than a lot of Gospel songs. Nicely done



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 Posted: Thu Jan 17th, 2019 09:19 pm
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This is a great song sir, and I thank you for sharing it! The Lord is real, and scripture abides for all eternity! Christ Jesus soon shall return for the church of the living God! Hold on to your faith sir! :)



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hdolan wrote:
http://howmarwriters.com/Upload/Eagles.mp3

When The Eagles Gather ©

Now the city streets are angry and the devil's running free
Everyone wants to follow is there no one who would lead
Some folks kill each other for the colors that they wear
And the three AM siren wails fill the poisoned air

Wrong or right is something on which we cannot agree
We're seeing what the kids have learned at their daddy's knee
A mama cries old Lord please don't let it be my son
With tear stained eyes a lawman asks do you know where he got the gun

Could it be that hated prophet was right all along
Did we really sell our soul for pleasure and a song
Will the moon turn blood red and the sun no longer shine
Or could it be it's just me and I have lost my mind

Chrs:

Well I read some place I think it was in Matthew twenty four
That the time would come when we would hear the rumor of war
But this would just begin the sorrows much more lay in store
When the eagles gather in the air he'll be standing at the door


My first impression is *** but i don't live in your country, ill leave at that

[Edited for language - RDM]

Last edited on Sun Jan 20th, 2019 01:38 am by RainyDayMan

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 Posted: Sun Jan 20th, 2019 05:46 pm
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Good song. I really enjoyed it. I like your voice.



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 Posted: Wed Jan 23rd, 2019 01:00 pm
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Fantastic lyrics. I love it all around.



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 Posted: Sat Jan 26th, 2019 03:33 am
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Don’t take this the wrong way, but I feel the age in your voice adds this song in a good way. Nicely done.



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 Posted: Sat Oct 12th, 2019 02:11 am
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Cool song. I'm not a very religious man, but, like Bob Dylan said, I get my religion through the music. I love that image of "he'll be standing at the door". Great stuff.



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 Posted: Fri Oct 18th, 2019 01:07 pm
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Great stuff, drew me right in. Funny thing about decisions we make about chord changes and structure. I might do it different, but I went right along with this. Very classic style, of course. A bit of Ralph Stanley happening. Thanks for sharing!

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 Posted: Thu Oct 24th, 2019 02:32 am
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Nice work on the lyrics and delivery.

Consider trying the song with minor chords to better match the emotion of the lyrics. Major chords tend to sound positive and happy.

Thanks for sharing.

James



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 Posted: Wed Oct 30th, 2019 07:54 pm
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Very enjoyable. Your voice makes you sound like am old gospel preacher. Sounds like you've studied your Bible too. In our modern world it is of the utmost importance that we share tunes like this.



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