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 Posted: Wed Jan 16th, 2019 03:41 pm
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M.P. Dudash
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I’ve got cash
But I wish it was the paper kind
Cause I’ve been jonesin’ for a drink now
For a long time

So I took all my empties
Threw em in my truck
Now I’ve got,
Twenty three dollars tonight so we’re livin’ it up

We’re livin’ it up
We’re livin’ the high life
I hate to say, but I chose the Jack
Over my first wife

Now I got a girl
Who can skin a buck
We got twenty three dollars tonight and we’re livin’ it up

Bought a pack of smokes
And a case to share
But if you do the math, that’s less than a smoke
With each of our beers

Guess what we thought
Would be enough
Quickly dried up, and all we’ve got
Is two damn bucks

We were livin it up
We were livin the high life
Till I called her by my ex’s name
And it started a fight

She said that she loved me
But love ain’t enough
It’s really tough, livin’ it up
On twenty three bucks

It’s really tough livin’ it up
On twenty three bucks


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 Posted: Wed Jan 16th, 2019 03:48 pm
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Great one M.P. The line that made me laugh out loud was: "We were livin' the high life, 'till I called her by my exes name, And it started a fight"!!! That is a winner! :cool:



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 Posted: Wed Jan 16th, 2019 03:58 pm
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Thanks Marty! I made that mistake on the phone once. As soon as I said it I knew I was in for it.



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 Posted: Wed Jan 16th, 2019 07:49 pm
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Interesting story. Amusing and entertaining. I liked some verses better than others.

I didn't care for "Now I got a girl
Who can skin a buck"

I did like these the most:

"So I took all my empties
Threw em in my truck
Now I’ve got,
Twenty three dollars tonight so we’re livin’ it up"


"Bought a pack of smokes
And a case to share
But if you do the math, that’s less than a smoke
With each of our beers" (that is funny)



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 Posted: Wed Jan 16th, 2019 08:11 pm
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M.P. Dudash
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Thanks for the reply, Andrea! I’ll see how the others feel as well and if they feel the same I’ll either make changes or scrap it, thanks..



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 Posted: Wed Jan 16th, 2019 08:26 pm
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Definite potential MP! Might need a word or two adjusted once set to music just for fit.

But I like the tone and feel of it.

I like the "Now I got a girl
Who can skin a buck" lines
creates a sense of contrast with the first wife

and I like the other lines too!

I can't quite feel the rhythm of it, but if you can get it set to music should be a good one.



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 Posted: Wed Jan 16th, 2019 08:31 pm
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Thanks Owen!



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