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 Posted: Tue Jan 1st, 2019 02:10 pm
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Marty Ray Boone

Joined: Mon Oct 24th, 2011
Location: Fort Mill, South Carolina USA
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Favorite Artist: "Rev.Jimmy Swaggart" "Owen Hovenden" Kerry Boone
I am a: Singer/Songwriter/Musician
I feel free as an eagle
soaring high in the sky
For I know that I'm going
where I never shall die!

The hand of my Lord
touches deep in my heart
I pray that his Spirit
shall never depart

I have new direction
A spiritual flight
So close to my master
Who makes my heart right!

I constantly seek him
to guide my dear life
And keep on believing
For end of all strife

Oh glorious Savior
My heavenly king
You live in my heart now,
and cause me to sing!

All over this World
I preach of your LOVE
the king of the ages
In heaven above

You'll come in your Glory
as found in the book
The words on the pages
We can take a look

At what God has spoken, through Men here below
These words come so quickly
God's Spirit does flow
For I have committed

To LIVE this short LIFE
Committed to Jesus
Who frees us from strife
Oh, reach out to Christ now

Just let him come in!
Deliver your soul now
From weights of your sin!
Unspeakable Glory, oh master on high

Receive all my praise now
My heart deeply cries
To know you more fully
My Lord in the sky

Soon coming with Glory
To Earth here below
Great JOY fills my heart now
A river does flow

For you touch my LIFE
With Glorious LOVE
No LOVE like the master's
In heaven above!

copyright on January 1st, 2019

My Lord gave me this song soon after I saw some Eagles, I believe, soaring above my home this morning! Peace


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Last edited on Tue Jan 1st, 2019 10:06 pm by Marty Ray Boone

Marty Ray Boone, now seeking God's will for my life and asking if I may serve him as a gospel bass singer and singer of harmonies in that form of music! I thank Holy God for my voice! Near perfect pitch as well, guidance for my fingers on that piano, AMEN
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 Posted: Tue Jan 1st, 2019 08:56 pm
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TSF Administrator

Joined: Thu May 17th, 2007
Location: Stratford, Australia
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Favorite Artist: James Taylor, Cat Stevens, Joni Mitchell
I am a: Songwriter/Musician
I like the "free as a bird" theme. And "soaring" works very well with feelings of joy. You might be able to use the bird / eagle motif more in the song to reinforce that. So perhaps a "spiritual walk" becomes a "spiritual flight"? Although you would need to change the associated rhyme to make that work.

Most of the verses have a universal feeling that anyone can connect with. The fourth verse, with:
And keep on believing
I shall find a wife!

is specifically about yourself, which goes the other way.
I think the more people can project themselves into the song the more they will enjoy it.

Overall this is uplifting and hopeful. Very positive.

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 Posted: Wed Jan 2nd, 2019 10:02 pm
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Location: Poughkeepsie, New York USA
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Favorite Artist: Queen, Tom Petty, Metallica, Kansas, Guns N' Roses
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 Posted: Wed Jan 2nd, 2019 10:21 pm
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Marty I like you but for me there's too many verses man.

Take the lines you like put them in three verses :cool:

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 Posted: Thu Jan 3rd, 2019 12:47 am
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M.P. Dudash

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Location: Ohio USA
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Marty, another strong one! I like the change you made from what Owen mentioned. It is a bit long but sometimes I believe a song has to be long to get its point across. As long as it's not American Pie, I think you're ok.

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 Posted: Tue Mar 5th, 2019 04:37 pm
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Location: Eugene, Oregon USA
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Great work brother. One thought. If it's too long, you could split it into two songs.

Last edited on Wed Mar 6th, 2019 09:48 pm by SongWriterJoe

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