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 Posted: Tue Dec 25th, 2018 06:49 am
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jgkojak
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Bad Advice

The hardest part was when I had to tell you
All the little things that you do
Are likely to come back and haunt you
Little do you know it's true

And the games that you're playing
To pretend that you don't know
Exactly what it is I'm saying
It's time to let it go

Bad advice you weren't even listening
Bad advice is a losing way
Bad advice welcome to the christening
Get on board the bad advice train

Last edited on Tue Dec 25th, 2018 06:50 am by jgkojak

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 Posted: Tue Dec 25th, 2018 10:45 am
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Marty Ray Boone
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This song is better. I like the music. I have heard better singers!:zorroface



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 Posted: Tue Dec 25th, 2018 08:54 pm
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It's a nice groove! I got into that.

The structure feels a bit odd. The "bad advice" part (which I like) feels like a chorus, but if so why isn't it repeated?
Perhaps you could put a solo in there after the chorus, then come back to the chorus again.

The "christening" rhyme felt a little forced to me, though your options are limited there- probably need to go for a near rhyme.

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 Posted: Sun Dec 30th, 2018 10:30 pm
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I like the verses, but am having a little trouble with the chorus (bad advice...). I like the bad advice idea, but am not understanding the meaning of all the words.

Also, you song is only just over 2 minutes. It would be great to add more to the song, or build on the chorus, or both.



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