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 Posted: Tue Oct 30th, 2018 08:10 am
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Marty Ray Boone
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I want to tell a joke that is so funny
that you'll soon roll down there upon the stinkin' floor
To fill your heart with so much joy and laughter
Saying I can't take this feeling any more!

Like stories of the flying squirrels and monkeys
Just like a zoo out there in outer space
To make you wet your pants and then be silly
And dance a jig for all over the place!

Let's all get up and dance and then be jolly
for to come right here and then for us to join
This wondrous super duper happy party
To make you then to start to flip a coin

To see who is the life of this great party
It's heads or tails for everyone to see
Which friend says "I just don't know what you're smoking"?
But please give that great stuff right unto me!

Let's all roll upon the floor with our fun laughter
And dance a jig, then sing a happy song
the squirrels and all the crazy flying monkeys
With ease and joy we start to sing along!

This song could surely then be sung forever
the words could touch you each and every day
Let's just tell all of our cares and every worry
to get the heck out from this place today!
copyright Tuesday, October 30th, 2018
My family seen below in picture when I was eleven years old!







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Last edited on Fri Nov 9th, 2018 05:26 pm by Marty Ray Boone



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 Posted: Tue Oct 30th, 2018 04:18 pm
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jgkojak
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Great concept - a little wordy in places - maybe more concise language

Also maybe change the tense - from the generic to the more personal -  the singer invites you personally, not us collectively-


Heard a joke its kind of funnyI was rolling on the floorFilled with so much joy and so much laughterI couldn't take it anymore
A story of flying squirrels and monkeysIn a zoo floating in outer spaceIt made me wet myself and feel so sillyI danced a jig right on over to your place
So let's get up and dance and be so jollyInvite everyone to come and joinThis will be our super duper happy partyGive me a quarter and let's flip a coin

To see who gets to be the life of party
For heads it's you for tails it will be me
I'm not really sure what it is I've been smoking
Come on into the party and set yourself free


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 Posted: Tue Oct 30th, 2018 10:33 pm
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RainyDayMan
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Very exuberant, and a bit whimsical too.
Nice to write something light-hearted now and again!

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 Posted: Wed Oct 31st, 2018 12:03 am
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Give me a couple of the tabs that you're taking lol good fun Marty makes a change from the misery that I write lol



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 Posted: Wed Oct 31st, 2018 03:05 pm
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Marty Ray Boone
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I was told that the song was a bit wordy, so I have editted it to make it better. I think it should pass now!:Guitarman2:



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