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 Posted: Mon Oct 1st, 2018 03:33 pm
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Hi guys, here's an early demo, work in progress of a new song that I wrote the other day. Please let me know what you think. I'm not happy about the last line in the chorus "let's go round again" I feel it needs something catchier or impactful there, any ideas?

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It was hell
But you can't tell
A new life, someone's wife
Things are going well
Robbed of your teens
And your childhood dreams
Looks faded, feel so jaded,You just wanna be seen

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As the seasons change
One thing stays the same
Making a start with a brand new heart
Let's go round again

2nd verse
Tying on your phone
That's all you know
Waiting ages to make some changes
Yeah it's time to go
You just wanna be loved
Live everyone does
Hope is gone if you wait too long
Dont get caught in the rush

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tVbnCNTd1UM&feature=youtu.be



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 Posted: Mon Oct 1st, 2018 11:35 pm
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RealKevM wrote:
I'm not happy about the last line in the chorus "let's go round again" I feel it needs something catchier or impactful there, any ideas?

Hmm, well I think that line is ok as is, but to spark other ideas:

Love re-engaged
Love rearranged
Take it round again
Try to love again
Spinning round again

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 Posted: Wed Oct 3rd, 2018 07:06 am
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Thanks for the suggestions i'm going to give it a go :)



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 Posted: Wed Nov 7th, 2018 10:08 am
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Hi guys well I played this new song live last night, i'd love it if you could have a brief watch and let me know what you think to the song now and my performance :)
https://youtu.be/6sz6SZW8C2o



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 Posted: Wed Nov 7th, 2018 11:21 pm
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Great performance Kev! I noticed you like to use that capo on your guitar. Seems to be working for you. Your vocal pitch is on point. Sounds great man!



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 Posted: Sat Nov 10th, 2018 09:59 am
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Thank you kindly, yeah been having a play with the capo to find a key that best suits my very average voice lol seems to have worked a little.



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Hi guys i'm still tinkering with this one, here's an acoustic demo using a multitrack digital recorder (I can't get my head around DAWs!) two guitar tracks, bass and maracas are involved :)
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=GtzbmPRnI8w



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Really like the new version Kev. But the maracas get a little crazy at the end and get off tempo. Do you use a metronome/click track to record?



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Hi mate, oh yeah the maracas are all over the place arent they? It was my first time using them lol



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I hear you man, it’s cool that you’re experimenting.



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samiamiamsam wrote:
I hear you man, it’s cool that you’re experimenting.
Thanks, i'll get there eventually with the sound I want lol



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Here's a live and acoustic version I just recorded this morning (with mood lighting!) please let me know how things are going with this :) https://youtu.be/3--HbWzWXkc



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