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TV BLUES
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 Posted: Mon Sep 10th, 2018 02:35 pm
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Misanthropist
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TV BLUES










She's at "don't care"stage and scrawls a new page

But she doesn't know where to start with such a young heart

and how she sneered as he stroked his beard

and how he had fun as she rolled her bun

but it's protocol for him to say sod all

They're both keen to keep their eyes on a screen...

watching people-watching people-watching-watching people




Smash smash smash







She's admired by a prince but had a glimpse

among sea gypsy kings and bum bleached pimps

but it's Marshall Blight she might choose tonight;

his aide de camp's got no torch outside

but it's protocol for him to say sod all

And he's keen to keep his eyes on a screen...

watching people-watching people-watching-watching people







There goes a jilted spinster's soul is well lit

by monsieur Casanova in a spit...

bye bye TV set I mean every bit




Smash smash smash

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 Posted: Tue Sep 11th, 2018 12:05 am
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I like the feel of this. Especially:
She's admired by a prince but had a glimpse
among sea gypsy kings and bum bleached pimps


Feels more like a code to be deciphered than a story line laid out, which is fine.

I'm reading it as a burn on hipsters and young folks caught up watching screens.

The sort of image I'm getting is screens within screens.

I may not understand it, but I do like it :)

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