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Ocean Blue River of Tears
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 Posted: Fri Aug 31st, 2018 01:54 am
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jgkojak
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I only have this chorus!

I'll cry me a river if you want me to
Wade through your ocean where the water is blue
I won't lie to you baby unless that's what I should do
Ocean blue river of tears

Last edited on Fri Aug 31st, 2018 01:55 am by jgkojak

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 Posted: Sun Sep 2nd, 2018 01:12 am
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You might start along the lines of:

I've been holding back, trying to be strong
Trying to show you I can be the one
But if you want me to, I can cry a river of tears

I prefer "blue river of tears" to "Ocean blue river of tears" but that may move you too far from your concept.

Good luck with it!

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 Posted: Fri Sep 7th, 2018 04:04 pm
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You could play off the idea that rivers flow to oceans.
The river becomes, or finds the ocean. 
Or even build from smaller to larger quantities.
- a single tear
- a cup full
- a pitcher
- a bucket
- a pool
- a lake
- a stream
- a river
- to the ocean

Brainstorming...

Tears/rain/flood/river/ocean

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