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Original song "Round and round we go"
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 Posted: Tue Jul 10th, 2018 05:15 pm
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Tj_pinkgurl
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Hey,

I wrote this to a backingtrack I found on youtube... I'm a bit unsure of it, not the best singer and the lyrics are kinda strange but I wanted it in the same sort of style as "Pink" .... Something I could imagine her singing.... I can't sing too well so your feed back would be great!

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=q0aPkOU50Cc&t=0s&index=18&list=PLAKm1ECb0qti1LiuS2_MWzi3bIgyFmyyL

LYRICS:

“Round and round we go”

You say I shouldn’t curse like that,
And I say sorry but we’re heading down the wrong track,
I pick my feet up and I stumble along,
Coz I just don’t know where my heart belongs

We can’t live like this,
Used to be pure bliss,
You said you’d never go,
Well I don’t know.
We can’t breathe like that ,
But, definitely a fact,
Adam and Eve didn’t truly believe,
Please don’t you leave.

Chorus
Round and round we go
I’m all cried out, screaming out to you
Round and round we go
I’m done for the night
Didn’t mean to fight
Will you come back and say you’ll stay with me till this ends?
Round and round we go.
Oh, oh, oh, oh oh oh oh.

Cruising through this path with you,
And either way I know we’re going down,
You say yes and then you start to say no
And I’m looking back wondering what is, I should know.

We can’t live like this,
Used to be pure bliss,
You said you’d never go,
Well I don’t know,
We can’t breathe like that ,
But, definitely a fact,
Adam and Eve didn’t truly believe,
Please don’t you leave.

Chorus
Round and round we go
I’m all cried out, screaming out to you
Round and round we go
I’m done for the night
Didn’t mean to fight
Will you come back and say you’ll stay with me till this ends?
Round and round we go.
Oh, oh, oh, oh oh oh oh.

Round and round we go
I’m all cried out, screaming out to you
Round and round we go
I’m done for the night
Didn’t mean to fight
Will you come back and say you’ll stay with me till this ends?
Round and round we go.
Oh, oh, oh, oh oh oh oh.

Round and round we go
Round and round we go
Round and round.

© Tamara Farmer 2018



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 Posted: Wed Jul 11th, 2018 12:29 am
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RainyDayMan
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Like the lyric TJ! Does have a Pink kind of feel to it.

You might try for a backing track with a faster tempo, and a bit harder feel to it. This one feels a bit soft to me, to match well with the lyric. Specially with phrases like "screaming out to you" in it. Doesn't mean you'll scream that out, but it doesn't feel like a ballad!

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 Posted: Wed Jul 11th, 2018 08:24 pm
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Cheers :)



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