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An Army of Your Own
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 Posted: Mon Jun 4th, 2018 07:32 pm
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Blues Preacher

Joined: Thu May 31st, 2018
Location: Illinois USA
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"An Army of Your Own"

You told me I was your—
Knight in shining armor,
That I was sent from God above.
You told me there would never
ever be another,
That I would be your only love.

Your pillow talk was never
meant to be a promise,
In the light of day
Your went your way
and left me on my own.

I found out too late
your shining knight was one of many,
You had built yourself an army of your own.

This started as a riff on a three-string cigar box guitar I built, which is tuned (bottom up) G-D-B. Inspired/influenced by Samantha Fish's song "Gone for Good".

I have to repeat parts of it for it not to be too short. Should I add another verse?

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 Posted: Tue Jun 5th, 2018 04:35 am
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TSF Administrator

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Location: Melbourne, Australia
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Blues Preacher wrote:
Should I add another verse?

Well I think you should. When it gets to:
You had built yourself an army of your own.
it feels like there's more to say at that point.

You've clearly got music for this, do you have a recording that you could post?

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 Posted: Tue Jun 5th, 2018 09:37 am
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The theme is good.

I haven't failed, I've found 10,000 ways that don't work. Thomas Edison (1847-1931)
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