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| Posted: Fri May 25th, 2018 01:27 am |
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Here is the second song I recorded.
My first demo was Carmel Corn - (caramel corn)
I had an idea what that song would sound like an worked accordingly.
However this song and nearly every one since has taken on a life of its own.
Here's a lnk to the recording on SoundCloud. Lyrics below that.
More discussion below.
https://soundcloud.com/user-426611522/when-life-shows-up
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Title: When Life Shows Up
Track Time: 02:22 / BPM: 100
VS 1
Life shows up - and there's broken glass
You help someone - and they kick your ass
When life shows up - when life shows up
VS 2
Nobody wanted you when you were born
You spend your life with a heart that's torn
When life shows up - when life shows up
Vs 3
Don't want to bring you down -
or leave you without hope
Life comes at you fast -
and we've got to learn to cope
When life shows up - when life shows up
Vs 4
Grace behaves with empathy -
helping those in tragedy
When life shows up - when life shows up
Copyright Steve Lundgren 2018
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This was the second song I recorded, following Carmel Corn (caramel corn).
While driving, I noticed the car next to me with a rear window broken out and covered with plastic.
It reminded me of a time when my rear window was broken out.
What I said in that moment became the opening lyric for this song.
"Life shows up and there's broken glass."
- Steve
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| Posted: Sat May 26th, 2018 11:37 am |
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Wow the song itself is really beautiful man! Lots of u2 vibes. The lead guitar brings something special to it. However, the music quality is lacking. I feel you'd profit very much from buying a better quality microphone.
That way everyone can appreciate the little details you put in, and it also becomes a better listening experience as a whole.
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| Posted: Fri Jun 1st, 2018 01:37 am |
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Thanks for the input. Someone else was saying that one of my songs had a U2 vibe.
But he couldn't remember the title. This must be it.
I'm running my instruments direct into my computer. Lots of overdubs.
All the effects are in the software. Amp modeling, reverb, delay and stomp boxes.
I use a microphone for vocals, that's it. Even the drums are programmed in the DAW.
These are all demos. I'm looking forward to working with a recording engineer
that knows what they are doing to record these songs with a full band.
- Steve
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| Posted: Sat Feb 9th, 2019 03:51 pm |
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Steve, I like the lyrics as well as the message in this one but the music is not my favorite. Not saying that it isn’t good, it’s just not my kind of sound, compared to some of your others. Thanks for sharing
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| Posted: Sat Feb 9th, 2019 06:58 pm |
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M.P. Dudash wrote: Steve, I like the lyrics as well as the message in this one but the music is not my favorite. Not saying that it isn’t good, it’s just not my kind of sound, compared to some of your others. Thanks for sharing
All good.
The main thing is that it is four verses and no chorus.
Each verse ends with the song title repeated twice. It works.
- Sketch
Last edited on Sat Feb 9th, 2019 06:59 pm by Motorist Sketchbook
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| Posted: Sun Feb 10th, 2019 01:02 pm |
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Hi Sketch, I like this one quite a bit.
My only thought would be to maybe swap verse 1 and 2. I guess a chorus couldn't hurt.
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| Posted: Sun Feb 10th, 2019 07:30 pm |
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Andrea wrote: Hi Sketch, I like this one quite a bit.
My only thought would be to maybe swap verse 1 and 2. I guess a chorus couldn't hurt.
Thanks, Andrea.
The first line in verse one is the origin of the song. (see post #1)
This song is an example of a no-chorus song. (one of a few)
The last line of each verse takes the place of a chorus. (as I see it)
And is a great way to strengthen a song by making a stronger "hook".
Without looking back at the lyrics, which line do you remember best?
- Sketch
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| Posted: Sun Feb 10th, 2019 08:44 pm |
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I did read the tread of comments. I guess when you said:
"All good.
The main thing is that it is four verses and no chorus.
Each verse ends with the song title repeated twice. It works."
I wasn't sure if you were happy, or figured it worked, so ok.
I did like how you started with: "Life shows up", but I might also like beginning with being born. Just my thoughts. I always like to have choices and ideas from others when I write. I also like that it is the writers ultimate decision. Enjoy
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