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 Posted: Tue May 8th, 2018 03:26 pm
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All of my current music was written for a secular audience.
However, it does come from a Christian worldview.

Two or three of the songs I have written and
recorded demos for would also fit under the heading
of gospel based on the message or lyrical content.

This song is one of those three.
I'll bring the others for review later.

Here's a link to the demo recording.
https://soundcloud.com/user-426611522/he-came-to-faith
Lyrics below. Song explantion below the lyrics.

Apologies for the horribly distorted and incomplete
guitar solo at the end.

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Title: He Came to Faith
Track Time: 02:13 / BPM: 70

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He came to faith -
or should I say returned?
The hard way back -
over bridges he had burned

Rebellious heart -
once hard as stone
Made some mistakes -
he had to own

Heard the voice of God -
while he was just a lad
Didn't realize -
exactly what he had

He walked away -
following the crowd
Became defiant -
self-centered and proud

He came to faith -
and now he's standing strong
Triumphant now -
over all that he'd done wrong

CH/ending
He came to faith - he came to faith

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

This song is a personal testimony of my spiritual journey.
It was easier to write and sing in the second person.
What's your story?

- Steve



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 Posted: Mon May 14th, 2018 09:29 pm
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More about this song.

The process and timing of this recording was interesting.
To me at least.

This demo was recorded on the third day that I began to record demos.

Carmel Corn was the first song to be recorded.
Five days later I recorded, When Life Shows Up.

For my third day of recording, a week later, I recorded 3 songs in one day.
- I Can't Sing
- Yellow Hand
- He Came to Faith
The song, Pour My Ashes was recorded the following day.
So, 4 songs in 2 days.

I also recall doing vocal tracks on 7 songs in one day.
I'll never do that again. I can hear the fatigue on some of the tracks.

When I wrote the lyrics for, He Came to Faith,
the original idea was writing a general song about
someone on a spiritual journey of coming to faith.
But ended up as my own story written in the second person.

I suppose this song is not really a gospel song,
but it has a gospel message.

- Steve

PS - For more of the story on the making of my demos,
here's an interview on YouTube.

How To Get Started Recording Your Own Music
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_NB7ueBhJgE

Last edited on Mon May 14th, 2018 10:26 pm by Motorist Sketchbook



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Hey Steve, you and I have been talking about spirituality lately so I decided to review your song. I actually thought I had already reviewed this.

First of all your lyrics are beautiful. I love every line. The opening in particular is very powerful.

'He came to faith -
or should I say returned?
The hard way back -
over bridges he had burned'

That line really resonates with me because it happened to me. I was raised in the church but left for a while. I never lost my faith, but those were truly dark days for me.

Anyways, thanks for sharing this song with us.



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I really like this.

One thought I had was that this could be a refrain:
"Rebellious heart -
once hard as stone
Made some mistakes -
he had to own

I felt like it could have been repeated after:
He walked away -
following the crowd
Became defiant -
self-centered and proud

I guess I feel like there is a small gap between the last 2 verses. I see him walking away, but what brought him back?



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Andrea wrote: I really like this.

One thought I had was that this could be a refrain:
"Rebellious heart -
once hard as stone
Made some mistakes -
he had to own

I felt like it could have been repeated after:
He walked away -
following the crowd
Became defiant -
self-centered and proud

I guess I feel like there is a small gap between the last 2 verses. I see him walking away, but what brought him back?

That's a good idea.
I may need two stanzas to make it work.
How does this strike you?

- Sketch

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
As he matured -
came time to re-assess
Lines once blurred -
the cause of such a mess

Then came the time -
he had to choose a side
To take a stand -
with no place left to hide
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

The word "re-assess" is a little awkward.
But rhymes nicely with "mess".

Here it is in the context of the verse before and after.
I also moved the "refrain" verse forward in the order.

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He walked away -
following the crowd
Became defiant -
self-centered and proud

Rebellious heart -
once hard as stone
Made some mistakes -
he had to own

As he matured -
came time to re-assess
Lines once blurred -
the cause of such a mess

Then came the time -
he had to choose a side
To take a stand -
with no place left to hide

He came to faith -
and now he's standing strong
Triumphant now -
over all that he'd done wrong
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Does that work?
What could we use to replace "re-assess"? (and "mess")
Or does that work for you?

The words "review" and "new" come to mind.
But I don't think they are as strong as "re-assess" and "mess".


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You work fast. Let me think a bit on this.



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Andrea wrote: You work fast. Let me think a bit on this.
Scary fast...

I was considering starting a Demo-In-A-Day recording service.
(I must be crazy) lol

- Sketch




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Here is the new updated version.
Two verses were added to address the gap that Andrea was seeing.

This follows a better chronology.
Previous verse two was swapped with previous verse three.

So, thanks to Andrea's keen eye, I present to you...


Title: He Came to Faith
Track Time: 00:00 / BPM: 70
 
- VERSES -
He came to faith -
or should I say returned?
The hard way back -
over bridges he had burned

Heard the voice of God -
while he was just a lad
Didn't realize -
exactly what he had

He walked away -
following the crowd
Became defiant -
self-centered and proud

Rebellious heart -
once hard as stone
Made some mistakes -
he had to own

As he matured -
came time to re-assess
Lines once blurred -
the cause of such a mess

Then came the time -
he had to choose a side
To take a stand -
with no place left to hide

He came to faith -
and now he's standing strong
Triumphant now -
over all that he'd done wrong

- ENDING -
He came to faith - he came to faith

© Steve Lundgren 2018/2019
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 Posted: Sat Jan 26th, 2019 03:41 am
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Nice work Steve. I hope to someday get the guts to sing and put my own lyrics out as well. Gotta get this dang guitar down though.



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M.P. Dudash wrote: Nice work Steve. I hope to someday get the guts to sing and put my own lyrics out as well. Gotta get this dang guitar down though.
Hey thanks for the listen/read and positive comments.

I have seen lots of folks become proficient on the guitar in a year or two.
And a few that were up and running in a matter of months.

This song is super easy to play. Just two chords. C and Am.
If you can finger those two chords and move back and forth between them,
you could play this song. If you can sing while you play the chords,
you have arrived. I can't even do that. lol

- Sketch

PS  --- I'm actually a terrible guitar player.
The recording software makes me sound like a pro. lol
(amazing what you can do with copy/paste)



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I really like the riff, Steve. Catchy. My thought is that it's begging for a modulation. As for the story, 'he came to faith' strikes me as the peak of the journey. So I'd start the journey more like a beginning, make vs. 1 'heard the voice of God when he was just a lad...,' and work the tale chronologically from there. My thoughts. Cheers. BTW, I think you sound a little like Neil Young!

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Janke wrote: I really like the riff, Steve. Catchy. My thought is that it's begging for a modulation. As for the story, 'he came to faith' strikes me as the peak of the journey. So I'd start the journey more like a beginning, make vs. 1 'heard the voice of God when he was just a lad...,' and work the tale chronologically from there. My thoughts. Cheers. BTW, I think you sound a little like Neil Young!
Yes. I get the Neil Young comparison a lot.
I was never a huge fan, but I guess I did like his voice.
And sometimes I sing to myself Horse with No Name. lol
Such a great hook.

Andrea had encouraged me by her critique to add to the lyrics.
See verses five and six.

I was planning to add those to the recording at some point
with the key change modulation you mentioned.
So, I agree with the comment, obviously.

Thanks for the review and listen. Watch for the extended version yet to come.

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