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 Posted: Mon Apr 9th, 2018 08:04 pm
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https://youtu.be/012iIxBXhb4

Heres a video of our acoustic version of an original song written by JD. Check it out and let us know what you think.
Thank you.
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 Posted: Mon Apr 30th, 2018 08:17 pm
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I liked listening to it. Thanks.

I like the story, the double/triple meaning of
the chorus and the character development.

But you didn't write the song, as I understand it.
So, it should really be judged according to performance.

In that regard, you need to take it further.
I liked the two guitar parts using a capo on one guitar
to add some color due to chord voicing variations.
The singing was good, with phrasing breaks for emphasis.

Since it is a performance, it needs more instrumental work.
A melodic introduction, maybe a solo or instrumental
verse in the middle and an ending part. (outro) Maybe even
a key change for the last verse, to emphasize that
conclusive part of the song.

- Steve



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Thank you for yiur feedback. We appreciate it, we take everything and either apply them to current or future writing sessions.

Here is a link to the studio version of this song. Thank you for taking time out to critique our original. You are a valued asset!
https://www.reverbnation.com/froggrassmusic/song/29529010-if-youre-goin-my-way-original-song

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Motorist Sketchbook wrote:
I liked listening to it. Thanks.

I like the story, the double/triple meaning of
the chorus and the character development.

But you didn't write the song, as I understand it.
So, it should really be judged according to performance.

In that regard, you need to take it further.
I liked the two guitar parts using a capo on one guitar
to add some color due to chord voicing variations.
The singing was good, with phrasing breaks for emphasis.

Since it is a performance, it needs more instrumental work.
A melodic introduction, maybe a solo or instrumental
verse in the middle and an ending part. (outro) Maybe even
a key change for the last verse, to emphasize that
conclusive part of the song.

- Steve





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Thank you for yiur feedback. We appreciate it, we take everything and either apply them to current or future writing sessions.

Here is a link to the studio version of this song. Thank you for taking time out to critique our original. You are a valued asset!
https://www.reverbnation.com/froggrassmusic/song/29529010-if-youre-goin-my-way-original-song

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FGM wrote: Thank you for yiur feedback. We appreciate it, we take everything and either apply them to current or future writing sessions.

Here is a link to the studio version of this song. Thank you for taking time out to critique our original. You are a valued asset!
https://www.reverbnation.com/froggrassmusic/song/29529010-if-youre-goin-my-way-original-song

Wow. That's awesome.
Takes care of the issues I was having with the other demo.

Is that the only music you have online?

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Motorist Sketchbook wrote:
FGM wrote: Thank you for yiur feedback. We appreciate it, we take everything and either apply them to current or future writing sessions.

Here is a link to the studio version of this song. Thank you for taking time out to critique our original. You are a valued asset!
https://www.reverbnation.com/froggrassmusic/song/29529010-if-youre-goin-my-way-original-song

Wow. That's awesome.
Takes care of the issues I was having with the other demo.

Is that the only music you have online?

- Steve


Yeah, the other demo we were putting down for the studio to make us a click track. So we recorded,it for our channel and the engineer.
Right now thats all we have, but on our YouTube channels we have more originals we wrote and are working with currently. Along with some covers.

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We thank you for taking time out and checking our track.

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Very nice. Good voice. Any way to reverb the percussion a bit ? Are you using a DAW ?

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 Posted: Wed May 16th, 2018 03:50 am
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Nice. Very easy to listen to.

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