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Seamus
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It's no surprise that you light up the skies
with a smile as bright as the day
the look in your eyes showing no lies
tells me that you're here to stay

I'm all out of luck used it all up
when you said that you'd be mine
such a delight when you gave up the fight
and the pieces all fell into line

I'm on top of the world now I've found my girl
its clear for all to see
the smile on my face lights up the place
at last I'm happy to be me

I'm all out of luck used it all up
when you said that you'd be mine
such a delight when you gave up the fight
and the pieces all fell into line

I feel like a king now you're wearing my ring
so elated I'm walking on air
you're such a find an intelligent mind
and all the fun of the fair

I'm all out of luck used it all up
when you said that you'd be mine
such a delight when you gave up the fight
and the pieces all fell into line

CopyrightAlanEvans20102017

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Nice! Good to see a happy song.

I like your rhyming scheme, but I would also consider using a bridge with a completely different pattern just to break it up a little in the middle and add variety.

I like these lines especially:
I'm all out of luck used it all up
when you said that you'd be mine

starts off like a negative, then turns it right around.

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Thanks for looking friend

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This is an impressive write. Very good.

I, too, really like the rhyme scheme. Nice work!!

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This is the kind of song that has a sing-along hook that could ge tstuck in your head for days1! The kind of songs that have been played on radio a lot lately!

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Nice work Seamus

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Thanks to you all who looked and commented, once again muchas gracias.


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