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Hey I've got this new song that I'm stuck on. I've got a good first verse, but don't quite know where to go with it. I know I want to have a couple more verses that keep with the 'If you could make me' motif.

If you could make me laugh
Maybe you could win me over
At least a little bit
If you could make me smile
I could forget for a short while
About everything else

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Favorite Artist: James Taylor, Cat Stevens, Joni Mitchell
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You could try
"If you could make me cry" next

"If you could make me try" maybe after that
"If you could make me out" is a possibility

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