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Alaska Girls Kick A**
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 Posted: Sun Aug 6th, 2017 04:45 pm
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Tekboy
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I haven't contributed anything for entirely too long. Wrote this without any help.


They warned me not to mess with her
But I did not understand
The things a girl from Alaska
Could do to a man

Now I'm all torn up and ragged
My head just wants to spin
I'm back out on the highway
And runnin' like the wind

                   (Chorus)

Alaska girls kick a** and she kicked mine
How does someone so mean
Get to look so fine?
I'm headed to Mexico
that's about as far as I can go
Cause Alaska girls kick a** and she kicked mine

Well I knew she was a beauty
That was really plain to see
She pushed all those good buttons
That were hidden inside of me
But the first time she got angry,
The first time we disagreed
My face looked like a grizzly bear
Had got a hold on me

                 (Chorus)
                  (Tag)



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 Posted: Sun Aug 6th, 2017 04:45 pm
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Tekboy
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I started this one before I moved to Florida from Alaska. :)



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 Posted: Sun Aug 6th, 2017 11:17 pm
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RainyDayMan
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Lovely to see something from you Tekboy!

I really like your hook:
Cause Alaska girls kick a** and she kicked mine
that's pretty good!

And the whole chorus works well. I like the running to Mexico part too.

In V1 I would probably write it:
The things an Alaskan girl
Can do to a man

but that might be more a personal preference

and the rhythm of this line felt a bit awkward:
That were hidden inside of me

but overall I like the attitude, it has a good feel to it, especially that chorus. :)

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 Posted: Mon Aug 7th, 2017 03:58 pm
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Thanks. I like your first suggestion.

I like the "How does someone so mean get to look so fine." :)



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