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 Posted: Fri Jul 21st, 2017 08:56 pm
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ADORATION IN THE MOMENT (an ode to ‘temporary insanity)
Joel Fass © 2016 Exemplar

The light hit you just so
That night at the old bistro
That I thought I was falling
Falling---but no, heavens no
It was only Adoration---Adoration in the Moment

Your face was a vision
An angel’s above
What a foolish decision
Confusing that with love
For it was only Adoration
Adoration in the Moment

Should a friendship really end?
Are you not my truest friend?
You have your love
Time for fantasy’s end

You’re not my destiny
Unless that destiny’s to be
Wisdom, strength and piety



So next time I’ll know
When in our bistro
Should I start to daydream
To just ‘let it go’
Time to ‘wise up’ Have a
Drink from Truth’s cup
Too much time misspent
On Adoration in the Moment



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 Posted: Wed Jul 26th, 2017 05:03 am
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I love 'Adoration in the moment" as a phrase and a title. Just lovely. I really enjoyed this one.

I particularly liked:
You’re not my destiny
Unless that destiny’s to be

the repeat on destiny with the extra rhyme at the end works beautifully!

I wasn't sure about "piety" though. I know you have adoration and angels referenced elsewhere, but it stood out to me as being a little out of context with no real explanation.

But that's a minor nit in an otherwise lovely lyric!

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 Posted: Wed Jul 26th, 2017 03:38 pm
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RainyDayMan wrote:
I love 'Adoration in the moment" as a phrase and a title. Just lovely. I really enjoyed this one.

I particularly liked:
You’re not my destiny
Unless that destiny’s to be

the repeat on destiny with the extra rhyme at the end works beautifully!

I wasn't sure about "piety" though. I know you have adoration and angels referenced elsewhere, but it stood out to me as being a little out of context with no real explanation.

But that's a minor nit in an otherwise lovely lyric!
Glad you liked it, Rainy.

'Piety' is real, at least to me, b/c the person in question is a devout woman who LIVES it, rather than preaches or otherwise fat-mouths.

You (and others here) may have figured out by now she is also the inspiration for Lodestar, The Lady Who Looked After Birds, and in a fun, fantasy way, Library Lady.

Eschewing any drama or detail, it would be a fair and objective statement that my life has not exactly been a bed of roses. BUT, music aside, I am blessed and fortunate to have her in it...



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 Posted: Thu Jul 27th, 2017 02:40 am
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