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https://soundcloud.com/user-745253707/heard-of-a-man/s-w9y9e
I wanted to write something in this genre,
but I didn`t want to preach, or have it to dark..
so I kept this kinda in the center of the road
I don`t know if this even qualifies as gospel....
but its the only gospel song I have....lol Lane
heard of a man
head bent and bleeding
heard of a man..
seen all there is ever going to be.
heard of a man
forgive all others
I have heard of a man
that could set you free.
Chorus:
He said ..I don`t have very much time
brothers watch for me.
I don`t have very much time
my Father is calling me.
heard of a man
changed up the water
heard of a man
that could walk on the sea.
I have heard of a man
says you have to believe.
heard of a man..and He has heard of me.
Chorus:
He said ..I don`t have very much time
brothers watch for me.
I do not have much time
my Father is calling me.
music bridge:
Chorus:
..I don`t have very much time
brothers watch for me.
I don`t have very much time
they are going to crucify me.
tag:
heard of a man....heard of a man....
"question my abilities..never my heart"
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| Posted: Sun Mar 19th, 2017 09:44 pm |
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I like this a lot! I don't write in this Genre but I don't see why this wouldn't qualify.
Love that blues sound, and some lovely guitar work.
I like the low-key lyric too. Understated.
Have you considered a dramatic pause at the end of the chorus?
A strong chord on the "My" in "My father's calling me" with the rest of the line just vocals, then a solo guitar riff to bring back the next verse
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| Posted: Mon Mar 20th, 2017 02:39 pm |
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This is very good friend it has a nice style to it; a very good job nice story to it; well done.
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| Posted: Thu Mar 30th, 2017 07:38 pm |
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thank you guys for taking a look at this, it really was a different kind of write for me.
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Pretty cool, Lane. You sound like Willie Nelson. I think this could be tightened up some, mostly structurally. But it certainly gets the idea across. Plenty to work with, and a good listen. Thanks.
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| Posted: Tue Apr 25th, 2017 09:55 pm |
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thanks "J, most of the songs I have are finished by someone else, this song I just had in a folder, never had it finished..[vocal] have the music track, that's not to bad, but the vocal track is needy....lol I`ll find time someday. thanks so much for giving this a listen...
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Yeah this is really good, gospel blues for sure, i like Owen idea of a dramatic pause at the end of the chorus just before the music bridge, would get me to my feet thats for sure 
Really cool song would definitely goes down great live 
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| Posted: Thu Jul 20th, 2017 07:38 pm |
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Chorus: 2:46
..I don`t have very much time
brothers watch for me.
I don`t have very much time...
but if you know me
(dramatic pause)
you'll see eternity
add the crucify line to the first chorus
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| Posted: Thu Sep 21st, 2017 05:39 pm |
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Hi all I up dated this song..
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| Posted: Thu Sep 21st, 2017 09:38 pm |
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Beautiful!
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