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 Posted: Sun Mar 19th, 2017 09:04 pm
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https://soundcloud.com/lane1777/heard-of-a-man

I wanted to write something in this genre,
but I didn`t want to preach, or have it to dark..
so I kept this kinda in the center of the road
I don`t know if this even qualifies as gospel....
but its the only gospel song I have....lol Lane

I sing a little rough but I`m old and tired..


:12
heard of a man
head bent and bleeding
heard of a man..
seen all there is ever going to be.
heard of a man
forgive all others
I have heard of a man
that could set you free.

Chorus:
He said ..I don`t have very much time
brothers watch for me.
I don`t have very much time
my Father is calling me.

1:25
heard of a man
changed up the water
heard of a man
that could walk on the sea.
I have heard of a man
says you have to believe.
heard of a man..and He has heard of me.

Chorus:
He said ..I don`t have very much time
brothers watch for me.
I do not have much time
my Father is calling me.

music bridge:

Chorus: 2:46
..I don`t have very much time
brothers watch for me.
I don`t have very much time
they are going to crucify me.

tag: 3:07
heard of a man....heard of a man....



"question my abilities..never my heart"

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 Posted: Sun Mar 19th, 2017 09:44 pm
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I like this a lot! I don't write in this Genre but I don't see why this wouldn't qualify.
Love that blues sound, and some lovely guitar work.
I like the low-key lyric too. Understated.

Have you considered a dramatic pause at the end of the chorus?
A strong chord on the "My" in "My father's calling me" with the rest of the line just vocals, then a solo guitar riff to bring back the next verse

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 Posted: Mon Mar 20th, 2017 02:39 pm
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This is very good friend it has a nice style to it; a very good job nice story to it; well done.



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 Posted: Thu Mar 30th, 2017 07:38 pm
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thank you guys for taking a look at this, it really was a different kind of write for me.



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 Posted: Mon Apr 24th, 2017 12:50 pm
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Pretty cool, Lane. You sound like Willie Nelson. I think this could be tightened up some, mostly structurally. But it certainly gets the idea across. Plenty to work with, and a good listen. Thanks.

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 Posted: Tue Apr 25th, 2017 09:55 pm
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thanks "J, most of the songs I have are finished by someone else, this song I just had in a folder, never had it finished..[vocal] have the music track, that's not to bad, but the vocal track is needy....lol I`ll find time someday. thanks so much for giving this a listen...



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