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 Posted: Fri Nov 2nd, 2018 06:38 pm
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Thanks, friend, can you put some music and a voice to this?



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Very bold - love it. I can picture the whole song taking place scene by scene.



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 Posted: Wed Jan 16th, 2019 10:25 pm
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Thanks for looking and commenting friend.



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Where did you go to Mr Fasstrack?



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 Posted: Fri May 24th, 2019 09:27 am
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Almost ten thousand views on this anyone got music?



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Great lyric, Seamus. I like the line about a place where the devil won't treat. But I also quite like the idea of waking up where the devil breaks bread, kind of where he hangs out with new folk.

Looking forward to hearing it.



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Maybe you'd like to put the music to it?



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I'm primarily a lyricist; rubbish at melodies. My writing partner may have been able to help, but he barely has enough time to work on our stuff at the moment, and we need to get some new material finished. They're strong lyrics, and I'm sure someone will pick them up.;)



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I live in hope. lol



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 Posted: Wed Oct 2nd, 2019 11:56 am
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Can someone bring this to life?

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What do you think of this?
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 Posted: Sat Oct 12th, 2019 02:54 am
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It all sounded pretty good to me (music, lyrics, singing). I'm coming late the thread but I like this. Cool synth sound. Moog synthesizer?



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 Posted: Sat Oct 12th, 2019 03:42 am
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No "Synth1" virtual synth VST. Free to download if you care to.



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 Posted: Thu Oct 24th, 2019 02:48 am
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Reads well and sounding good in Owen's version.

It throws me off a bit that I like the line "the devil won't tread" and the idea reworking "where angels fear to tread", but "devil may tread" seems off b/c people often associate demons/spirits and drinking.

"Don't like those days that end in a Y"

I like this, but most would here instead of read a song, so it would sound like "Don't like those days that end in a WHY" ....BUT that's a cool line too!


pain in my head I so wanna cry...could be stronger
I thought today I'd wake up dead....funny/clever
I've been to places the devil won't tread....needs clarification

one more drink and I'll be okay...good
thats what I tell myself to say...could be stronger
just one nip to keep out the cold....great
its a story that many have told...could be stronger

oh these lies no-one believes...this doesn't match up with the last line of previous verse
even myself I can't deceive...awkward wording for rhyme's sake
just one more til the bottles done....ok
another day that the devils won....here is confusing devil here/doesn't tread/may tread

tomorrows just another day....fine
another bottle in the same old way....good
maybe then I'll wake up dead...nice play on previous setup
in a place where the devil may tread...unclear again

Thanks for sharing.

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 Posted: Tue Dec 31st, 2019 07:21 pm
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Happy new year to you all.

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I haven't hung out here for some time. Came looking for an old lyric of mine.

But I plan to someday record The Devil and the Bottle on a blues date. It's built on your lyric and you deserve a co-write. PM your info and I'll check back. Thanks...



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Here's my final cut. If it comes to a commercial recording you are owed a co-write. It's inspired by and built on the bones of your lyric:

THE DEVIL AND THE BOTTLE Joel Fass © 2018 Exemplar (ASCAP)



As yet another wasted day finally ends
With the devil and the bottle, those unshakeable friends
I pray that tomorrow I’ll wake up dead
But for now I’ll live on to bear this load instead

I’ll go on telling myself, each and every day:
‘Just one more drink, I swear I’ll be okay’
‘Just one last taste, after that no more!’
Yeah, just one last taste, Hey, devil---you pour!

Next day, the bottle beckons: ‘Just one nip, you're wanting some’.
Then without thinking twice, once more I succumb
My way to fight temptation is not to fight at all
So I devour that bottle, thinking ‘hey, it was his call’

Soon before I know it, another day is done
As the devil sits and grins, for once again he’s won
And the days all run together, each and every one the same
With the devil and the bottle as masters of the game



So once again, as another day is done
The devil toasts the bottle---once again they've won
These days sure run together, and always end the same
With the devil and the bottle as masters of the game

Tomorrow will surely be just like today
Another pour, another bottle in the same old way
If I should wake up dead, I still won’t be free
Even death won’t ever stop those two from haunting me

So I’ll just pour one more, what the hell---live for today
Try not to think too much, say again ‘Hey, I’m okay’
But of course, down deep it’s gone beyond my control
Can’t win when the devil and the bottle own your very soul
Not when the devil and the bottle own your very soul



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