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 Posted: Mon Jan 30th, 2017 10:08 pm
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The devil may tread

Don't like those days that end in a Y
pain in my head I so wanna cry
I thought today I'd wake up dead
I've been to places the devil won't tread

one more drink and I'll be okay
thats what I tell myself to say
just one nip to keep out the cold
its a story that many have told

oh these lies no-one believes
even myself I can't deceive
just one more til the bottles done
another day that the devils won

tomorrows just another day
another bottle in the same old way
maybe then I'll wake up dead
in a place where the devil may tread

CopyrightAlanEvans29012017



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 Posted: Mon Jun 5th, 2017 04:50 am
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Wow! You sure don't beat around the bush.

Strong stuff...



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'Just one nip to keep out the cold'
That was my favorite line! Really good!

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Thank you for your time, are you interested in a collab on any of my songs I have no musical ability whatsoever; I only write words.



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Cheers Thanks.



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I've been to places the devil won't tread
what a wonderful phrase!

I like this one a lot Seamus! It's down and dirty and unrelenting.

Very good stuff. :)

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Thank you.



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I hate days that end in a Y: Killer. May be one of the best lines I ever read!

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Would you like me to write music to this? (I don't have any home studio set-up and you'd have to read the lead sheet or have someone play it for you).

Let me know...



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 Posted: Sat Jun 24th, 2017 02:15 pm
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Hi
Sorry for the delay but I've only just seen this; I would love for you to put some music to this whether it be lead sheet or other that would be fantastic; I can't read music but I will find someone who can play it for me. Thank you ever so much.



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Dark and beautiful, man im looking forward to hearing this :cool:



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Seamus:

I copied your lyric into Word, corrected some grammatical things, and---I hope you don't mind---changed 1 line to: '...a story that many times has been told'. Just seemed stronger.

When the spirit hits me, I'll be happy to try to write a suitable melody. Hell, if Sondheim can write about slitting people's throats, throwing them down a chute to where meat pies are made from them (Sweeney Todd)---AND have an award-winning hit, I'll be damned if I can't write some music to a theme less dark than that...



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I await with abated breath lol



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Hope you don't mind that I made some changes. I won't go further to write music w/o your approval. The premise is def intact:

THE DEVIL MAY TREAD

Don't like any days that end in Y
Pain in my head so bad I could cry
I thought today I'd wake up dead
I've been to places the devil won't tread

‘Just one more drink and I'll be okay’
That’s what I tell myself each and every day
‘Just one last nip to keep out the cold’
Just one last bill of goods to myself I’ve sold


And these lies I tell no one would believe
But me, so I tell myself ‘my pain I must relieve
I’ll pour just one more, since the bottle’s nearly done’
So I drink to one more day that the devil has won

Tomorrow will only be the same as today
Another bottle in the same old way
Maybe the next day I'll wake up dead
In a place where the devil may tread

CopyrightAlanEvans29012017

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Here's my final cut, including a title change. I won't do anything w/it w/o your consent:

THE DEVIL AND THE BOTTLE
Seems like any day that ends in Y
Brings pain so bad I just wish I’d die
And I thought today for sure I'd wake up dead
‘Cause I've been places even the devil won't tread

‘Just one more drink and I'll be okay’
That’s what I tell myself each and every day
‘Just one last nip to keep out the cold’
Just one last bill of goods to myself I’ve sold

And the pain, oh---nobody would believe
Except me, as I tell myself ‘It’s only to relieve.
I’ll pour just one more, since the bottle’s nearly done’
Then drink to one more day that the devil has won

So tomorrow will only be just like today
Having ‘one last bottle’ in the same old way
And maybe the day after I'll wake up dead
In a place where just the devil is known to tread

CopyrightAlanEvans29012017



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work away my friend I cant wait to hear the finished product.



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