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Whisky blues
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 Posted: Thu Jan 26th, 2017 11:41 pm
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Woke up this mornin when I fell out of bed
nothin worse than than a bang on the head
noticed my clothes all over the floor
I tried to stand but I crawled to the door

my heads banging like an old steam train
think I done some damage to my brain
my clothes are scattered can't find my shoes
and I'm still suffering from the whisky blues

I shouted my baby but got no reply
felt so sick I thought I would die
oh the morning after the night before
I woke up hurting has I hit the floor

the hair of the dog might do the trick
but just the thought makes me feel sick
everytime I say it won't happen again
then my just one turns into ten

my heads banging like an old steam train
think I done some damage to my brain
my clothes are scattered can't find my shoes
and I'm still suffering from the whisky blues

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 Posted: Fri Jan 27th, 2017 11:12 pm
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Classic blues! Even starting with "Woke up this morning..." you just can't get more bluesy than that!

The verse that starts:
my heads banging like an old steam train
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is particularly good

and this line lso caught my eye:
oh the morning after the night before

Good stuff.

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 Posted: Fri Jan 27th, 2017 11:50 pm
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Thanks for looking its my first attempt at this type of tune, so all in all I'm happy enough.



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 Posted: Sun May 14th, 2017 02:58 am
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Funny lines in there.

Good work...



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 Posted: Sun Jun 11th, 2017 12:43 am
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Thank you.



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 Posted: Sun Jun 11th, 2017 12:44 am
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Thank you.



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 Posted: Fri Feb 2nd, 2018 07:12 pm
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need a composer to help with making this into a recordable song.



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