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 Posted: Sat Oct 29th, 2016 04:57 am
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Love me again

Verse(1)

Another day, another dawn.
I cling to a dream,
wrapped in a memory of you
as tears embrace my face
like raindrops hugging the leaves.

All my thoughts reflect back
to that first hello,
when passion yearned,
and I was consumed
with your beauty,
and fell into you.

I go to places
we used to go,
only to find emptiness
Time and love
abandoned me.

(Chorus)

Will you ever be able to
love me again?
Forever and ever again?

Love me again


Verse (2)

I remember you said,
we are eight miles high
and never coming down,
while perched on that Citadel
high above the clouds.

Time slowed,
a cloud of deadness
drifted over us.

When the silence where beauty once
embraced could no longer be held,
the silence of your words
caused us to stray.

I panicked,
said things
that weren’t very nice.

Like a falling angel,
our playground in
the sky began to fall.


I now walk alone
in the valleys,
Lost,
trying to find
the path
back to your love.


(Chorus)




Will you ever be able to
love me again?
Forever and ever again?

Love me again

Last edited on Sun Feb 26th, 2017 02:32 pm by wkamen



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 Posted: Sat Oct 29th, 2016 07:10 am
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Well that came out very nice!
Is this a paid demo where they took your lyric and wrote the melody for you? If so, they did a good job getting the feel right in my opinion.

Like that lift at the end before the final chorus too.

Still not mad keen on the part starting
"When the silence...", it doesnt feel like a natural fit to me,
but that's a minor quibble in a lovely song.

Should be very pleased with this one.

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 Posted: Sat Feb 25th, 2017 03:57 am
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Thanks Rainy Day Man



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 Posted: Sun Feb 26th, 2017 11:19 am
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says video is unavailable ???



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 Posted: Sun Feb 26th, 2017 11:21 am
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Say's that the video is unavailable ???



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 Posted: Sun Feb 26th, 2017 02:59 pm
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https://soundcloud.com/wkamen/love-me-again-final

The song is now available

Last edited on Sun Feb 26th, 2017 03:00 pm by wkamen



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 Posted: Sun Feb 26th, 2017 03:01 pm
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https://soundcloud.com/wkamen/love-me-again-final

The song is now available
Last edited on Sun Feb 26th, 2017 10:00 am by wkamen



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 Posted: Wed Mar 1st, 2017 10:25 pm
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Hi Bill you got a nice song but verse 2 for me didnt flow like lyrics and the middle three lines are in the wrong place, just going by what im reading and hearing also theres no link in your first post, but as i said you got a nice song here but for me everything like the flow has to fall into place, can you tell me are you happy with this song or is there more to come, hope you dont mine my honesty thanks.



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 Posted: Wed Mar 1st, 2017 11:11 pm
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 Posted: Wed Mar 15th, 2017 04:51 pm
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This is very good friend loved it.



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 Posted: Thu Jun 15th, 2017 09:19 pm
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Very Nice! Was that a paid demo? Just asking because if so I may look into it. If it was, could you let me know which one? I'm a little worried about trusting one of those services. Thanks

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 Posted: Thu Jul 27th, 2017 11:23 pm
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Thanks for all the comments



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 Posted: Tue Dec 5th, 2017 01:23 am
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Very nice

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