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A song for the moments of what's happening in America right now
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 Posted: Fri Apr 19th, 2013 12:40 am
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thehoundsoflove
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Please shine a light

Houses in ruin fall derelict
Oceans run out of ships to sink
Tunnels run out of light
When you can't see then end in site
It takes all your might
Just to get by

You know it doesn't have to be so bad
Don't let the hurt get so massed
Please shine a light on all of us
And let the darkness lift

You have to know that times can be unjust
There's no passion or lust
To see everything beautiful
That sadness so unremovable
Please shine a light
Hold all the lost ones tight
Yeah it's easy to say all is right
Hard to take, so hard to make
When the end of hard times isn't in site

Please shine a light
Hopes in short supply
You can lift the level a little
Keep shining until we feel hope brand new
Until you see the light shine from us onto you

Keep the line clear
Keep the first aid kit near
We got to break this chain of sorrow
Live today wishing yesterday was tomorrow

You know it doesn't have to be so bad
Don't let the hurt get out of the bag
Please shine a light on all of us
Give a happy ending to this stories script

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 Posted: Sat Apr 20th, 2013 11:18 am
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I really liked seeing how discussions in other threads are influencing your writing.  Super cool!  Exactly what I joined this community for!

I think the lyrics are working well.  If forced to present something to change I would work on the line "You can lift the level a little" because I'm not sure of the meaning, but again, I personally like it when lyrics are puzzling and enigmatic. 

Lets hear a demo!



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