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 Posted: Fri Jan 4th, 2013 03:21 am
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bmwrigh
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BRANDON WRIGHT
©2013

IT'S NOT ABOUT THE MUSIC,
THE MELODY OR WORDS,
IT'S NOT ABOUT ANY SONG,
OR ANY SINGLE VERSE,
IT'S NOT ABOUT WHO SINGS TODAY,
BUT A HEART SET UP TO PRAISE,

(CHORUS)
IT'S ABOUT THE KING OF KINGS,
THE ONE WHO DIED FOR ME,
IT'S ABOUT HIS SAVING GRACE,
AVAILABLE FOR FREE,
IT'S ABOUT HIS RIGHTEOUSNESS,
AND A HEARTFELT SIMPLE PRAYER,
IT'S ABOUT HIS LOVE,

IT'S NOT ABOUT THE SETTING,
THE LIGHT SET UP OR THE BAND,
IT'S NOT ABOUT THE CROWD,
OR WHO'S LIFTING UP THEIR HAND,
IT'S NOT ABOUT THE SPEAKER,
BUT A HEART SET UP ON HIM,

(CHORUS)
BRIDGE:
IT'S NOT THE MIC,
IT'S NOT THE AMP,
NOT THE GUITAR,
OR A FRIEND,

(CHORUS)

Last edited on Sun Jan 6th, 2013 06:59 pm by bmwrigh



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 Posted: Sat Jan 5th, 2013 02:48 am
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Hi Brandon,

I like this! Nice! I see how your verse focuses on "It's not about....." and your Chorus focuses on "It's about ....". Perfect contrast there and this makes the verse ask the question before the chorus serves as the answer to those questions. My suggestion is to revise the Bridge so it is unlike the verse or chorus sections.

Instead of :

BRIDGE:
IT'S NOT THE MIC,
IT'S NOT THE AMP,
NOT THE GUITAR,
OR A FRIEND,


How about:

BRIDGE:
THE MICROPHONE WONT.........,
THE AMP CAN'T ..............,
THE GUITAR COULD NEVER ............,
COULD A FRIEND EVER ...........?,


Find your own way to go about this, but know that a bridge is most effective if it's tone and rhymes and music are different from the rest.


Hope this helps!


-Troy



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 Posted: Sun Jan 6th, 2013 06:49 pm
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Thanks I appreciate it, I'll see what I can do with it.



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 Posted: Mon Feb 10th, 2014 03:47 pm
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i liked it.it waas tricky and good to read.

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