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ADrunkPanda
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Another song that I am working on. Not sure about how the melody will go, though.

(Verse)
See that my heart is good
Even though my tongue speaks ill
Feel free to go your way
Do what you will
My eyes couldn't see the cave you were in
The inescapable circumstance
How hard you've fallen

(Prechorus)
Forgive my ignorance
Excuse my cruel heart
But don't let this ship fall
Don't let the fire start

(Chorus)
Will you come back
Or will you sail on
If you leave
I wish you the best
So long

(Verse)
Keep the candle on
Can you see my face
Look closer at me
My existence don't erase
I want you to know our friendship
Was always the same
I regret to realize
That I was the one to blame


sophiaraquellyrics
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I really, really love these lyrics. I can relate to them, and I think that for lyrics to be easily relatable for people is good. I feel as if it could be a little longer, but that is all I have to say about it. I think it is a really good piece!

ADrunkPanda
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Glad you were able to connect with it. I think it's important to be able to relate to others in some way. I'll work with it more to make it a little longer, since I still  need to add the bridge. Thanks for having a look!

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ADrunkPanda wrote:
Glad you were able to connect with it. I think it's important to be able to relate to others in some way. I'll work with it more to make it a little longer, since I still  need to add the bridge. Thanks for having a look!



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