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 Posted: Sun Aug 5th, 2012 06:58 pm
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Here is a tune that I am working on this week. I copyrighted the lyrics a while back with the singer. I am playing all of the instruments, mixing, and producing the tune. It is not mixed yet and these are not the real vocals, just scratch vocals. We will add in the harmonies and other things as soon as the lyrics are set in stone.


What do you think that it needs? (Lyric and music)


Thanks!



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Pretty As The Picture -- C. 2012 - Michael E. Lynch / Jeffrey Allen Edwards


Hello Charlotte, It sure is nice to see you again

Oh, how've Ya Been

I’ve been sittin' here just thinking bout

The times that we were down and out

Girl it's good to see, your face


You're just as pretty as the picture

I've been staring at since the day that you've been gone


What's that Charlotte, Yes I must have missed most every--thing

I kinda went insane

Turnin' bottles up ------ just kickin' back

Remembering the times we had

And where it all went wrong


You're just as pretty as the picture

I've been staring at since the day that you've been gone


Gone, ------- Outta my life and gone from my dreams

You've been gone

You took the things that meant the most to me


Time and Time I stare at that ole' picture

Of, you, and me and the kids, hangin' Up there on my wall

I wonder how things might have been

If you ever really gave a damn at all


So Long Charlotte

It's been real but now I've got to --- go

I thought you should know


I've found someone else to hold me tight

Love me each and every night

And swear that I'll never be alone

She's much prettier than the picture

I been staring at since the day that you've been gone


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 Posted: Wed Aug 8th, 2012 12:02 am
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The music and vocals are really good on this Michael, and for the most part I like the lyrics, but I’m not sure about the way it ends. Are those last two lines suppose to be humorous or serious?  


Love me each and every night

And swear that I'll never be alone

She's much prettier than the picture

I been staring at since the day that you've been gone



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 Posted: Wed Aug 8th, 2012 01:03 am
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Thanks!

It think it supposed to be serious and funny. It is a true story about the singer of my new my band, his wife, and his new found girlfriend.

I meant to say ex-wife.



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Interesting turn at the end.

I thought the music and lyrics had definite country appeal.
Would you consider double-tracking your vocals at 1:22 or thereabouts? Just a thought. Otherwise, very enjoyable.



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Thanks for your great feedback!

I am in the Jeffrey Allen Edwards Band. Alan Jackson cut two of Jeff’s songs, but they never made it on any albums. We have been trying really hard, but no luck yet! Every time something looks great, something bad happens.

Trying to figure out the new direction of the band is a real challenge. He likes to write true story songs and I write fiction stuff most of the time.

At the moment, we have several songs going, but we are going to finish this one first, before diving into the rest of them. Jeff is still trying to figure out how he wants to phrase this song. I hope that we can have it ready before the end of the month. A few people, on different songwriting sites, are quite offended by the lyrics of this song, and some seem to really like it. I personally thought it was a pretty cool twist at the end. I played all of the instruments and Jeff wrote 75% of the lyric. I suggested and wrote the bridge. I also changed the name of the subject from “Darling” to “Charlotte”. I told Jeff that there are way too many “Darling” songs out there. Some people don’t like the song breaks, or drum breaks. Since the song has an old traditional feel to it, the music just seemed too cliché and worn out to me. I don’t know??? When we get the real vocals finished, I will mix it several different ways and choose the one that most people like the most.

Thanks again!

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Congratulations on becoming a part of a band, Michael! Good luck to you guys! Hope you get a cut and have a huge hit someday!  :cool:

About the ending on this one...I see you guys have gotten mixed reviews on it. I can certainly understand why it would be offensive to some and would be willing to bet it was mostly females who found it offensive. I'm not all that keen on it myself.  I know it's just a song, but now that you have told us the ending was written based on a true life experience, I like it even less. Of course this is just me, but I have to tell you, as a female listener, I wouldn’t buy it. Sorry for being so blunt about it, but the ‘twist’ you guys have given this rather nice song just isn’t my cup of tea.



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 Posted: Thu Aug 16th, 2012 06:30 pm
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Hum! ---- Okay, I totally agree!

Now, I will have to get Jeff to agree.

He has be through a lot over the past year. His wife really did a number on him. He caught her sleeping around on him while he was out playing band gigs. I guess that this is the reason for this song?

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Your song flows naturally, driven by a lot of heartfelt emotion. Good melody and vocal. Sounds like Jamey Johnson.
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Cool,

Thanks!

Some people really like it and others hate it.

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This is a song that anyone can relate to! Reminds me of Rascal Flatts' "These Days!"

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One of my favorites so far! Very good!

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Posted: Sun Aug 5th, 2012 07:58 pm

Yeah sounds good, thanks :cool:



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Nice production! Just some thoughts :)

Hello Charlotte, It sure is nice to see you again

Oh, how've Ya Been

I’ve just been reminiscing 'bout

The times that we were down and out

And how it seems I can't forget your face


You're just as pretty as the picture

I've been staring at since the day that you've been gone


What's that Charlotte, Yes I've packed up all of your things

And kinda went insane

Turnin' bottles up and lookin' back

At time we wasted fighting and

Realizing where it all went wrong


You're just as pretty as the picture

I've been staring at since the day that you've been gone


Gone, -------
Outta my life and out of my dreams

You've been gone

That pictures' all that's left of you and me
...........burned in my memory


All those nights I'd wonder where you are

Thinking I could do better than a picture on my wall

I consider how things should have been

If you ever really gave a damn at all


So Long Charlotte

It's been real but now I've got to --- go

I thought you should know


I've found someone else to hold me tight

Love me each and every night

And swear that I'll never be alone

She's much prettier than the picture

I been staring at since the day that you've been gone



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Wow, I need to pay more attention to the dates lol :?



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