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 Posted: Wed Jan 9th, 2013 04:33 am
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Joined: Sat Dec 15th, 2012
Location: Austin, Texas USA
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This is a really cool piece of work! I have some thoughts though...
I was curious as to if you had music written for this to go along with the lyrics?

I also was thinking, you could consider changing "Your cute smile never catching my attention" to adding a more unique adjective to replace the word cute. Possibly one that could leave the listener thinking more.

My other idea, you could re-write this line, "I have waited an unbearably easy long time." because I feel as if 'unbearably easy long' could be a mouthful with all the syllables. I like the word unbearable quite a bit, it is up to you, but I could see the line becoming "I have been waiting for an unbearable amount of time"

Good luck, and keep up the good work!

--Sophia Raquel

“The number one reason why people give up so fast is because they tend to look at how far they still have to go, instead of how far they have gotten.” Vaibhav Shah
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