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 Posted: Thu Dec 6th, 2012 12:31 am
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hardtwistmusic



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This one sings well to a real slow melody in the first verse.... The first verse is dramatic and meaningful.

Then the second verse (to my ear) doesn't/won't sing the same. There is no prosody between the two verses. They don't (to my ear) "fit together." Of course, it could be that you have a melody in mind that integrates the two of them together... but I don't see how it would. That I can't see it doesn't mean it isn't so btw. . . just that I can't see it. I've certainly been pleasantly surprised before.

All in all, to my ear, this song lyric isn't as strong as the last one you posted.



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