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 Posted: Sat Jun 5th, 2010 01:29 pm
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Keith Austin

Joined: Wed Apr 28th, 2010
Location: Durban, South Africa
Posts: 110
Hi Johnbee.

This is a really nice melody. It's the kind of song that is hard to pull off, and yet, you have the range and timbre in your voice to really do it justice.
It's a great song as it stands, however, if it were destined for radio play I would have done a few things differently.

Firstly. The length of the song might be too much for a radio edit. This is a tough one because slow songs take longer to get through than more up tempo ones and you possibly need all that time to lay the story out.

Secondly, in the later part of the song where you have introduced the drums and a little more orchestration, the song is so much easier on the ear. I would have possibly brought this feel into play earlier in the song, maybe second verse.(Maybe had only one verse before the first chorus?)

Lastly. I agree with Dennis about the panning of the voice. It is a nice effect, but could be more subtle. Possibly varying from 11 o'clock to 1 o'clock rather than 9 o'clock to 3 o'clock.

All said & done, this is a great song!


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