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 Posted: Sat Apr 8th, 2006 03:04 pm
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Jeff Knight

Joined: Tue Jan 10th, 2006
Location: Very East Nashville, Lol, North Carolina USA
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Mai wrote:
Any suggestions?

Well I don't know if I can give anything
productive, but I think the start of the
second verse should go back to the thumbing
beside the road visual. Maybe open up with
watching cars go by and not getting a ride
or maybe talking bout a girl passing by
in a car and let that girl be the one
the angel is talkin bout, or maybe you see
a billboard in the distance with an ad for
a casino with a showgirl on it and let that
image be what the angel is referring to.
Or maybe split the billboard idea for ver 2
and the passing woman as ver 3. That would
give me more visuals, but it is your song
and you can do with it as you please. :)
I also think this song needs an ending
which shows an accomplishment or a
disaster by saying something bout most days
the devil wins or the angel wins. It just
needs a better ending to me. :)

Last edited on Sat Apr 8th, 2006 03:08 pm by Jeff Knight

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