|View single post by Jeff Knight|
|Posted: Sat Apr 8th, 2006 03:48 am||
|MAI: You have the makings of a hit song here.
Very good hook and concept !!! Kudos !!!
But let me tell you my opinion, so keep or sweep
I had a great image going in my mind with visuals
all the way through to the end of the 1st Chorus.
Once the 2nd verse started, I lost the visuals and
had to start thinking in abstract. This to me, means
that the song lost it's flow starting with the 2nd
verse even though the vusuals kept coming back
temporary in the choruses. Just my opinion as I am
a nobody, so throw this right in the trash can LOL.
Wish I had thought of this hook !!!!
I'm envious ..... grrrrrrr !!!!! LOL
Songwriting is composed of two acts,
first inspiration, and then exploration