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what a sweet lyric for your little girl, and this is something I believe you should finish, at least for the fact, it's something you can show or play for her. It's SO important for a little girl to have a relationship with her daddy, (it's something I never had as a little girl) so I am making it a point with my own life, to make sure my girls have that with their own daddy.
Now, onto your lyric.....you've got some great imagery going on...(by that I mean holding her hand, being her protector, ect) But your "hook" as far I can tell is..."Here For You" and I only seeing it being mentioned in your build and tag.......you really want that to be your focus in your Chorus.
i can see and hear a really beautiful chorus.....with that tag (hook) I mean...lol
Build that up.....and by that I mean....situations where you are there for her.
This could be a lovely lyric and song.......keep working on it!!
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