View single post by Mai
 Posted: Fri Aug 22nd, 2008 08:46 pm
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Joined: Tue Apr 4th, 2006
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hi Alex

Whatever that movie with the line "You complete me"....wellll it is now being ridiculed........soooooooooooo

I tried

[vs. 1]

Life never seemed complete
til I held your lil hand
you looked up at me
and made me understand

those tears in your eyes
tear holes in my soul 'nd
that smile on your face
fills my heart to overflowin'

(That is quite a Forced rhyme, but it'll work in the singing, and you have your complete in the first line, sounding less like the movie.)
I Never Knew What Was Missing....(title?)

Now make this Chorus deep and moving, and write a second verse and build without those true and you rhymes.

Perhaps start with:

I won’t think about someday
When Mr. Right comes along
We have too many years

Good Luck

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