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 Posted: Fri Aug 22nd, 2008 07:46 pm
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Mai



Joined: Tue Apr 4th, 2006
Location: British Columbia Canada
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hi Alex

Whatever that movie with the line "You complete me"....wellll it is now being ridiculed........soooooooooooo

I tried

[vs. 1]

Life never seemed complete
til I held your lil hand
you looked up at me
and made me understand

[build]
those tears in your eyes
tear holes in my soul 'nd
that smile on your face
fills my heart to overflowin'

(That is quite a Forced rhyme, but it'll work in the singing, and you have your complete in the first line, sounding less like the movie.)
[Cho.]
I Never Knew What Was Missing....(title?)


Now make this Chorus deep and moving, and write a second verse and build without those true and you rhymes.

Perhaps start with:

I won’t think about someday
When Mr. Right comes along
We have too many years
To......................


Good Luck
Mai

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