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 Posted: Tue Dec 1st, 2020 09:21 pm
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BRD



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I like this one a lot. Some really strong parts. First verse is great for me. Visuals, everyone can picture it. Everyone can identify with it.

I'm sort of a dunce, but it took me a while to figure "Just like you made me" in the second line of the second stanza. Finally figured out she made you paint the door. May just be a me problem.

Other line that I thing could be made stronger is "Shame I can’t paint to forget"

I think the illusion of paint would be better if it was something like:

Shame I can’t paint to forget
Every memory.

Reason I say that is you paint over things and they're out of sight, out of mind. If you physically paint to forget, at some point, you stop painting. Wanting to paint over the memories is like begging for closure but knowing you can't get it.

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