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 Posted: Mon Nov 30th, 2020 12:43 am
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Andrea

 

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I feel like this is very close to being really good. A couple lines that are confusing are easy fixes.

Here are a couple ideas to use or lose:

"Can’t sleep or peace to find" - Peace is so hard to find

"Closed my eyes laid in our bed" - Closed my eyes, said a prayer

For me, I am lost as to why there is pain and regret. I am not sure why this man feels this way.



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