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The refrain is particularly good.
I like the verses too, but there are a couple of spots that feel a bit squished like:
I can’t help but get lost in your eyes
do, ‘Cos I know you’ll never look up and see
I think they could be smoothed out, maybe:
I get lost within your eyes
do, I know you’ll never look up and see
Worth pursuing!
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