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|Posted: Sun Nov 29th, 2020 08:13 am||
|Lots of emotion coming thru which is great.
And I like the strong visuals early on to set a scene.
"peace to find" is an unusual phrasing, but I think it will work, as it should sound quite smooth when sung.
In the opening verses it feels like the narrator is returning to a previous home now belonging to someone else:
Somebody painted the front door
but after the chorus it's like he has entered the house as his own:
Closed my eyes laid in our bed
and that feels like a narrative disconnect.