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 Posted: Fri Nov 27th, 2020 06:08 pm
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This is so emotional - I really like it. I think you have what you need to put this together in a more structured way. I would work some more on the rhymes as RDM pointed out, and also on keeping the tenses the same in the verses. You can read a little about structure here:

https://yourcreativeaura.com/verse-and-chorus-differences/

Let me know if you would like any further help. Good luck :)



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